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I Luv Halloween

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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to know how it can be improved. Thanks, Kaguya-chan (talk) 18:08, 18 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Crimsonfox's Comments

The article needs a lot of expansion first of all so sorry if don't make too many comments, the article is quite small still.
The plot section currently only really talks about the characters, this can be expanded into the story and then split into two sections if there is enough information.
Development is made up mostly of quotes. Cut them down and point out the most significant parts of the quotes that can't be adequately explained without them
The volume list, from what I know, shouldn't really have a place in articles. The paragraphs in it could be tweaked a little and put into a story section

Hope that helps. CrimsonFox ^talk 12:09, 28 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your helpful comments. Kaguya-chan (talk) 21:16, 29 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]