Wikipedia:Peer review/Hybrid Theory/archive2

Hybrid Theory

I'm renominating this article for PR because it just passed as a good article and I think with just some minor improvements, this time it can be ready for an FAC. And this time I want actual users offering suggestions on improvement. Thanks! (SUDUSER)₈₅ 15:03, 13 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]

"Following the success of Hybrid Theory, Linkin Park received invitations to perform at various prominent rock concerts and tours, including Ozzfest, the Family Values Tour, KROQ's Almost Acoustic Christmas, and the band's self-created tour, Projekt Revolution, which was headlined by Linkin Park and featured other bands such as Cypress Hill and Adema.[3][5]" - The word "prominent" is speculation on the writer's behalf, and needs to be taken out. LuciferMorgan (talk) 13:39, 14 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]
- Done You're right about that point. Is there anything else you'd like to scrutinize? (You can always give the article a full, thorough review; Be my guest!) (SUDUSER)₈₅ 14:12, 14 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]

"Although it did not become a single, another significant song from the album is “Points of Authority.”" - "Significant" is also speculation's on the writer's behalf. If you want a really in depth review, request the feedback of M3tal H3ad, Cricket02, CloudNine, 17Drew, Ceoil and WesleyDodds. If at least half of them review the article, you should be well away towards FAC. LuciferMorgan (talk) 17:42, 15 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]
- Done Ok I'll leave a message for those users you suggested. Thanks for your recommendations! (SUDUSER)₈₅ 05:57, 16 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Comment Possibly useful sources: [1], [2]. WesleyDodds (talk) 07:27, 16 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]
- I incorporated the latter as a reference to the fact about the album being the best-seller of 2001. I notice it has a review of the album, but it's more like an overview of the band and I don't think that's really necessary. (SUDUSER)₈₅ 16:09, 16 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Comment - Just for the record, I fixed all sentences containing speculations that were addressed by LuciferMorgan. If there's anything I seem to have missed, just highlight the sentences below and I, or someone else, will fix it. Other than that, are there any other sentences at all that need rephrasing or anything? (SUDUSER)₈₅ 15:27, 18 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Comment. The quotemarks around song titles should be ordinary quotemarks (i.e. ' " '). I'll review this article in more detail soon. CloudNine (talk) 17:14, 18 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]
- Done normal quotes have been added. (SUDUSER)₈₅ 08:07, 19 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]
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- Done All issues addressed by the automated review have been addressed. (SUDUSER)₈₅ 08:07, 19 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Cricket2

Lead:

Since its release, Hybrid Theory has been certified diamond by the RIAA, and to date has sold 24 million copies worldwide, making it

...and to date has sold... What date? This could yesterday, or tomorrow or next month when someone reads it. I would clarify....like, as of December 2007.... (or whenever), and update as needed in time.

Background:

A bit too many wikilinks of ordinary terms. Also, why does "MC" for Mike Shinoda redirect to rapping? And why does "music ensemble" (band I assume) redirect to "arrangement"? I understand "arrangement" to be a Musical arrangement. I'm not saying its wrong, just don't understand the reasoning and please excuse my ignorance if this is all correct. Maybe it's just terminology I'm not familiar with, like I've never heard of an ensemble being called an arrangement before. Just need a little clarity there.

♫ Cricket02 (talk) 04:02, 21 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]