Wikipedia:Peer review/How You Get the Girl/archive1

How You Get the Girl

I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to take it to FAC (which would be my first one). I have been significantly expanding the article in the past couple of days and I would appreciate any thoughts and advices on any aspect of the article.

Thanks, Medxvo (talk) 11:11, 11 November 2024 (UTC)

Ippantekina

• My immediate suggestion is to avoid the passive voice at all cost. Some examples:
  • It was written by Swift and the Swedish producers Max Martin and Shellback → Swift wrote it with the Swedish producers...
  • Particular praise was directed towards the song's chorus. → Critics particularly praised the chorus
• I don't think the record labels are necessary for the lead
• The current structure of "Music and lyrics" is quite confusing. I think it's best to separate paragraphs between the original song and the Taylor's Version re-recording
• I can't believe that critics described this song as a "ballad" but the sources do verify this, lol, anyway...
• MusicOMH's Shane Kimberlin, Nylon's Leila Brillson, and PopMatters's Corey Beasley praised the song's chorus, with the lattermost considering it one of Swift's "sing-song" and "indelible" choruses shouldn't this be in the "Critical reception" section?
• The "Critical reception" section is currently quite all over the place. I suggest you read WP:RECEPTION to work through the organisation and structure. My suggestions for now:
  • 1st paragraph: positive reviews, particularly the production
  • 2nd paragraph: mixed/negative reviews of the production
  • 3rd paragraph: mixed/negative reviews of the lyrics
  • Each paragraph should contain a topic sentence.

— Ippantekina (talk) 10:16, 13 November 2024 (UTC)