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Heimler method of Human Social Functioning

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I've listed this article for peer review because…it is the first article that I have submitted.

Thanks, Cannygirl49 (talk) 20:39, 19 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I've edited and Wikified the article, but here are some further improvements that could be made:

Use more inline citations, rather than just an end of article bibliography.
Discuss the historical use and relevance of Heimler's methods.
Don't link common terms like unique, subjectively, healing or society, unless linking to a more specific article, like "subjectivity (psychology)" or something. Some of these links may be useful, but go to disambiguation pages, like mirroring.
Maybe add a history section to discuss the creation of the method.
Add information about the method and the criticism to the lead.
More summary would be useful; I find the prose unclear. For example: "Heimler’s approach engages with the need to clarify the crux of the problem so as to facilitate a remedy". It might help to use less quotations.
It might help organizationally to create a section about use of the method distinct from the section describing the method itself.

~~Andrew Keenan Richardson~~ 19:20, 23 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Finetooth comment: The tools at the top of this review page are quite useful in evaluating every article. The "disambig links" tool, for example, identifies eight links in this article that go to disambiguation pages instead of their intended targets. You can use the tool yourself to see which ones they are. Finetooth (talk) 03:27, 24 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]