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I've listed this article for peer review because I hope it can become a GA article

Thanks, NoD'ohnuts (talk) 23:57, 14 July 2010 (UTC)NoD'ohnuts[reply]

Note to nominator: Due to a shortage of reviewers, peer reviews are being delayed for up to two weeks. It will help to speed things up if you can find time to review one article from the backlog list, which appears on the WP:PR page. Thanks. Brianboulton (talk) 16:49, 20 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I will be using Category:FA-Class The Simpsons articles as a guide for this review --Senra (talk) 17:19, 21 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Methodology. I examined all 21 Category:FA-class The Simpsons articles. I rejected 11 as not comparable. I was left with ten episode articles which had been promoted FA-class between March 2007 and October 2009. I then sorted them by date, with the newest promoted article first. I compared your article with those ten, giving more weight to more recently promoted articles. I am not qualified to judge this for FA-class. As I am not a ~~nerd~~ fan of the Simpsons, I thought this method might be the fairest way to review the article

Lead: we leave this till last but one thing caught my eye

"...the ninth episode of The Simpsons’ twelfth season..." and "...and the last episode produced for the eleventh season." and "...This is also the last episode in the BABF (season 11) production line,..." needs explaining in the body or removing from the lead

Size this article is 8.5 KB. The mean size of the 10 FA-class Simpsons' episode articles I examined is 11.5 KB. The smallest, Homer's Enemy (promoted May 2007) is 8,740 B and the largest is Lisa the Vegetarian (promoted August 2009) with 14 KB.

Structure the article seems to follow the average structure of the articles I compared it with, though three also have a Theme and a Merchandising section. I am not sure if such sections are appropriate for this article, so perhaps this is just an observation.

Guest stars I guess there were none

Plot generally a good read. Three comments

I do not think you should be wikilinking "Sick, Twisted, F***ed-Up Animation Festival" to Spike & Mike's wikipedia article? Potential WP:NPOV. Might be better to be explicit and say that it is a parody of
"... the doctors find a crayon lodged ..." and later "... head before, Dr. Hibbert feebly ..." begs the question was Dr. Hibbert one of the earlier Doctors and who are "The scientists opt to have ..."?
There are few few long sentences such as the 77 word "With Homer's newly ..., much to Flanders' disappointment.", and the 84 word final sentence of the plot. They are readable, but only just. You should probably break them up a little or use more ";"'s

Production, Cultural references, Reception in comparison to the other articles I read, I found these sections in your article a little light on detail

References you have 12 references. The mean number of references in the 10 articles I looked at is 25. The least number of references was 15 in Homer's Enemy (promoted May 2007) and the most with 41 was Lisa the Vegetarian (promoted August 2009)

I think this is the first time I have read a Simpsons episode on Wikipedia. I enjoyed the read. Well done. I hope you found the review useful. If you have any questions, please contact me on my talk page. Consider reviewing one article from the peer-review backlog (near the top of the Peer review page) which is how I found this article.

--Senra (talk) 19:26, 21 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]