Wikipedia:Peer review/Gray Davis/archive1

Gray Davis, former Governor of CA

I've listed this article for peer review because it needs to be edited, revised, and improved by another editor. I've contributed a large majority of the content and feel I can't take the article much further. I think the article could be a top rated article, even a feature article, with some more work done to it.

Thanks,

User:calbear22 18:44, 31 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

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You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, DrKiernan 10:18, 7 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]