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Graeme Smith

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I've listed this article for peer review because I want to get this article to GA status if possible. There seems to be a good basis to the article already, I just want to know how I can turn it into a GA.

Thanks, 02blythed (talk) 15:11, 10 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I think you should get this copyedited by one of the regulars before it is PRed. The language needs to be improved at several places. If you take the intro -

The first line should simply say who he is - cricketer, batsman, captain of South Africa
No need for the details like the Pollock affair in the intro
Bit more about what he does
IMHO, it is better not to include stats which are very volatile in the intro - in this case the 54 matches, which will become out of date tomorrow. Tintin 16:15, 10 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Is it now Ok 02blythed (talk) 08:35, 11 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Over the last few hours I have greatly improved the refs. Any more comments. 02blythed (talk) 15:56, 11 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Eddie6705 (talk · contribs)

I went through starting to cleanup the article and found a few pointers.

There should be no spaces between a comma or full stop, and the reference.
The reference shouldn't have redlinks in and some of them don't actually link anywhere, e.g. [http:content-uk.cricinfo.com/southafrica/content/player/47270. profile of Graeme Smith]. Cricinfo.
The individual sentances in the Career highlights sections should be combined to make larger paragraphs.
Headings should only have one capital letter in per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (capital letters)#Section headings. For example Early Years would become Early years.

Hope these can help. Eddie6705 (talk) 20:16, 15 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]