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Gin Tama

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I've listed this article for peer review to see if there are some notable issues (apart from my poor grammar). One of my main doubts is the themes section since it is the first time I have written one and I don't know if it looks good. By the way, this series is very episodic, so there is no way to expand it.

Thanks, Tintor2 (talk) 01:16, 7 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comments In my opinion, there's a difference between the theme of the story, which can point to an underlying social commentary and describes the setting, and the theme of the production work, which I usually call "style". What you have written here is something I usually consider as "style" since it provides commentary on the way Sorachi writes his stories. (There is the one comment about social inequality, but that it very minor compared to the rest of the section.) With that said, I think you provided a good amount of depth on Sorachi's writing style. You could probably combine the "Theme" section with the "Production" section into something called "Writing". (To me, "Production" sounds weird because you're focusing on the manga, which is a print publication.) After that, you can give it an overview again to pull out the parts of the section that describe the story's setting (like the social inequality) and recreate the "Theme" section. Arsonal (talk) 03:27, 7 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

The problem of merging these two is that themes is also composed of third-party sources. I thought of using production after seeing that most articles whose primary media is manga use them. However, I'm now thinking it could be changed to Development.Tintor2 (talk) 12:31, 7 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry, maybe I read that wrong, but how does third-party sources hinder a merge? "Development" is a good alternative title. Arsonal (talk) 18:37, 7 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Merging it to the creation would not be suitable since the third-party sources do not say what the author said. They are just meant to be an analysis of the series.Tintor2 (talk) 19:45, 7 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comment: You could rename the section Style and Themes. Kaguya-chan (talk) 19:56, 17 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comment: The "Themes and style" should just be "Style" since 90% of the section discusses the humour of the manga, which would be its style as opposed to its theme. The "Production" header should be something like "Conception" or "Conception of Gin Tama/the series" since it discusses how Sorachi thought up the manga. Suki Dakara 06:11, 22 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]