Wikipedia:Peer review/George Macaulay/archive1
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Macaulay was a particularly interesting cricketer from the 1920s and 1930s who played for Yorkshire. His career was quite impressive, but he was a very fiery character. I'm hoping to take this to FAC at some point. I'm conscious that the later part of the article is stats heavy, so I'd appreciate any comments about how this reads and the prose in general. Thanks, Sarastro1 (talk) 23:49, 13 August 2010 (UTC)
Finetooth comments: Thank you for another cricket lesson. This seems nicely done to me, a relative cricket ignoramus. The writing is crisp and clear, the organization just fine. No dabs, no dead links. I note the absence of images, but I don't know what to suggest. Here are a few small suggestions about minor prose issues, mysterious words, and possible expansions.
- Photos which are PD are a real difficulty to find, although they probably exist. --Sarastro1 (talk) 20:09, 26 August 2010 (UTC)
- Note 1: "When discussing the Yorkshire bowling averages, only bowlers who took ten wickets or more in that season are included in the placings." - Since the bowlers weren't discussing, maybe "The placings for Yorkshire bowling averages include only bowlers who took ten wickets or more in that season."
Test debut
- "He hit the winning run, batting at number eleven, sealing a one wicket win for England." - Hyphen in "one-wicket win"?
- "There were no international matches that season, but Macaulay was selected for The Rest in a Test trial against England." - What does "The Rest" refer to?
Mid-1920s career
- "On seven occasions he took seven wickets in an innings, his best figures being seven for 13 in 24 overs against Derbyshire." - I might have missed an earlier instance, but I think this is the first mention of "overs". Could the term be linked or explained?
Post-Yorkshire career
- "Ramsbottom were bowled out for 47 to give Macaulay's team a 26 run win." - Hyphen in "26-run win"?
Style and personality
- "When the pitch was suitable for spinning the ball, he bowled medium paced off breaks." - Hyphen in "medium-paced"?
- "(a wicket which has been affected by rain to make it very difficult to bat on)." - Isn't it the pitch rather than the wicket that is altered by rain?
- Just to make the sport even more confusing, "wicket" can sometimes mean the pitch. I've changed it! --Sarastro1 (talk) 20:09, 26 August 2010 (UTC)
Post-Yorkshire career
- "He was buried in Lerwick Cemetery." - Where is Lerwick Cemetery?
References and Bibliography
Possibilities for expansion
- Sports biographies sometimes include information about later family life, social life, and other outside interests (hobbies, charities, organizations). Did Macaulay marry? Did he have children?
- Good question. Probably not to both, but nothing in the sources. --Sarastro1 (talk) 20:09, 26 August 2010 (UTC)
- I don't know if size or appearance matters in cricket, but I wonder if Macauley was big or little, thin or roundish, tall or short. Did he wear glasses? Did he perhaps have a great shock of flaming red hair that distracted batters? Was he a fast or slow runner?
- Short of describing him from a photo, only one thing in sources, saying he had a lined face. Doubt it's worth adding. --Sarastro1 (talk) 20:09, 26 August 2010 (UTC)
I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog at WP:PR; that is where I found this one. I don't usually watch the PR archives or check corrections or changes. If my comments are unclear, please ping me on my talk page. Finetooth (talk) 19:31, 14 August 2010 (UTC)
- Everything done except the last two. Much appreciated, again! --Sarastro1 (talk) 20:09, 26 August 2010 (UTC)