Wikipedia:Peer review/Geoffrey Boycott/archive1

Geoffrey Boycott

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I've listed this article for peer review because I am hoping to get to FA eventually. User:Red Gown is creating an image of the man batting, and hopefully we can find some others somewhere as at the moment there are none.

But any other points, please feel free!

Thanks, SGGH ^speak! 20:43, 25 March 2008 (UTC)

Some random comments:

• Boycott established himself as one of England's finest opening batsmen and a very occasional medium-pace inswing bowler - the sentence unintentionally gives the impression that

he established himself as a very occasional medium-pace inswing bowler too.

• • Fixed
• His bowling does not deserve a line in the very first paragraph.
  • Fixed
• While a less successful One Day International player, becoming the first ever wicket in that format of the game, - the second clause does not follow from the first even though that seems to be the intention.
  • Fixed
• Not sure whether being the first man out in ODI is important enough to be mentioned in the intro
  • I personally think its quite notable, but appreciate your viewpoint
• He also remains active at Yorkshire, particularly in the selection of overseas players - Is this line still true ? The source is more than seven years old.
  • Fixed
• Why is almost two long paragraphs spent for whether Close said it or not ? The focus should be on the innings (which, I assume, is still considered as one of the all-time great List A innings).
  • It is, but it also typifies Boycotts attitude, unfortunately I didn't write the county section or much of the international, will have to contact the user who did
• Sydenham was not a spinner.
  • Fixed
• The county career section is unbalanced. Two large paragraphs for a single innings, two small ones for the summary.
  • As per above comment, I'll have to contact the user who wrote it all, I don't know much about his county career
• I get the impression from several parts of the article that the author is trying to reinforce the slow, dull Boycott image. For instance, was 32-over 23* at Taunton that bad ? From the scorecard one gets the impression that it was a seaming wicket. Somerset made 63 in 35 overs an Yorkshire had 60 overs to get the runs when Boycott batted. I don't know whether the point about his slowness about his slowness is valid for this case or not (what does the Wisden match report say ?), but there are similar hints throughout the articles when they are not really necessary. Tintin 02:19, 26 March 2008 (UTC)
  • Again, will speak to the author
• After reaching his hundreth test match during the series, he was appointed an Officer of the Order of the British Empire (OBE) in the 1980 Queen's Birthday Honours "for services to Cricket. - as per the newly inserted link to the London Gazette, the OBE was awarded on June 14 while Sir G's 100th Test was on July 2. Tintin 12:23, 26 March 2008 (UTC)
  • Fixed