Wikipedia:Peer review/François-Louis Auvity/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because, although it is complete and does not have major problems, it still requires to be reviewed and edited by native English speakers in order to reach good article standards.
Thank you very much in advance for your help. Mémoiredumaquis (talk) 11:20, 18 September 2024 (UTC)
Comments from Tim riley
[edit]I recommend splitting the article into a Lead section of three or four succinct paragraphs, summarising the main text, followed by a Life and Works section as the substantive article. The prose, let me say, is superb for someone whose native language isn't English. My problem with the article as it stands is that it lacks biographical information about his early years. Parents? Schooling and university/seminary? Church appointments before becoming a bishop? A more minor point is that Mende, in the text and the info-box, links to a disambiguation page rather than the particular Mende you have in mind.
This article was something of an eye-opener for me. I knew the Catholic church was often less assertive than it should have been in opposing Nazi atrocities, but I had no idea some of its bishops were positively in favour of them. Fine work on your part. Tim riley talk 13:51, 6 October 2024 (UTC)
- I am horrified to read that the author, Mémoiredumaquis, died shortly after posting this PR. I shall see if there is anything I can do to address the above points with a view to nominating the article for GA in the main author's memory. Tim riley talk 13:54, 6 October 2024 (UTC)
- Tim riley - That is indeed sad news. I think a decent article would be a most appropriate tribute, and it is clear that User:Mémoiredumaquis felt that the Fr:WP article was a whitewash. I'd be happy to help. As you say, the prose is excellent, but it does lack some of the basics one would expect in a bio article. This has some fleshing out of his clerical career, and I'm sure more could be found. I'll take a look. KJP1 (talk) 16:32, 6 October 2024 (UTC)
- p.s. Having read the French article, I do think there is some basic biographical material that could be used, with attribution of course. KJP1 (talk) 16:39, 6 October 2024 (UTC)
- It is worth noting that User:Mémoiredumaquis wrote that the French version is a biased attempt to whitewash Auvity's bio, and that is why he wrote the English version. -- Ssilvers (talk) 19:37, 6 October 2024 (UTC)
- p.s. Having read the French article, I do think there is some basic biographical material that could be used, with attribution of course. KJP1 (talk) 16:39, 6 October 2024 (UTC)
- Tim riley - That is indeed sad news. I think a decent article would be a most appropriate tribute, and it is clear that User:Mémoiredumaquis felt that the Fr:WP article was a whitewash. I'd be happy to help. As you say, the prose is excellent, but it does lack some of the basics one would expect in a bio article. This has some fleshing out of his clerical career, and I'm sure more could be found. I'll take a look. KJP1 (talk) 16:32, 6 October 2024 (UTC)
In the circumstances I think I am doing the right thing by taking it upon myself to close the peer review and then with the aid of WP colleagues, working on the article to the best of my and their abilities. Tim riley talk 16:42, 7 October 2024 (UTC)