Wikipedia:Peer review/Fort Lauderdale, Florida/archive1
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I would like to have this article reviewed to bring it to an WP:FA status.
Thanks, Canyouhearmenow 15:29, 1 November 2008 (UTC)
- The article is looking good. It seems to cover the major aspects. There are a few [clarify] tags in the demographics section regarding numbers with unclear units. Something else that is unclear is the term limits in the governance section - first it says 3 term limit, then it says the mayor is serving his 6th term. That the city is governed through that Charter may be worth mentioning. On the first sentence I would avoid the comparison to another city and go for more of a definition (ie. essential/defining characteristics) of Fort Lauderdale. The History section struggles to keep its focus as it wanders around Native American/Seminole and Florida history. Try and keep it focused on Fort Lauderdale. The article's principle weakness is probably the quality of the writing. This topic does not lend itself well to brilliant prose because it tries to lay down a lot of data, facts, and information.
- The History section could have better flow, like On January 6, 1836, Seminoles attacked the farm of the local Justice of the Peace, William Cooley, while he was away, killing his wife and children, and the children's tutor.
- "The city
doesexperiences cold fronts from November through March." - Try "On January 6, 1836, Seminoles attacked the farm of the local Justice of the Peace, William Cooley, while he was away, killing his wife and children, and the children's tutor."
- "Local bus transportation is provided by Broward County Transit (BCT), the county bus system. BCT provides for connections..." - ease off the "provides". Try Broward County Transit (BCT) operates the local bus service...". Maybe term 'public transportation' would be better?
- Before submitting the article to WP:FAC, ask one of the regular reviewers there whether they think the prose is ok. --maclean 03:53, 7 November 2008 (UTC)
- I appreciate the review and will work on those suggestions. Thanks again Canyouhearmenow 05:08, 7 November 2008 (UTC)