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I've listed this article for peer review because I believe it meets the criteria to become a Featured Article, but want some feedback first since it has been a few years since my last FA.
Thanks, NatureBoyMD (talk) 17:14, 14 September 2015 (UTC)
Comments from Cirt
[edit]Comments (having stumbled here from my Peer Review)
- Thank you very much for your efforts to contribute to Quality improvement on Wikipedia, it's really most appreciated !!!
- NOTE: Please respond, below entire set of comments, and not interspersed throughout, thanks!
- Checklinks tool - http://dispenser.homenet.org/~dispenser/cgi-bin/webchecklinks.py?page=First_Tennessee_Park - shows a few issues.
- Recommend archiving links via Wayback Machine by the Internet Archive with WP:CIT fields archivedate and archiveurl.
- Per WP:LEADCITE, info presently cited in lede is non-controversial and not-contentious, as long as it's later same material covered, and cited, in article body text, can remove those citations from lede.
- Per WP:LEAD, article intro sect should be able to function as standalone summary of entire article's contents. Suggest for length of article this size, expanding lede sect to 4 total paragraphs of at least 4 sentences each paragraph.
- Copyvio Detector - https://tools.wmflabs.org/copyvios/?lang=en&project=wikipedia&title=First+Tennessee+Park&oldid=&action=search&use_engine=0&use_links=1 - shows no problems here. Excellent job here, nicely done !!!
- Very nice job with overall structure and layout.
- Article has good flow for reader, throughout article body text.
- File:FirstTennesseeParkLogo.png = great job on fair use rationale at image page here.
- Article body text has some two-sentence-long-paragraphs and short paragraphs. Suggest expanding them, or upmerging them.
- Other events - this seems like something that could be ripe for expansion at least by a few sentences, how many attendees, etc?
- Other touches, such as seating section and restroom signs shaped like guitar picks and the use of red, black, and platinum silver, help the ballpark identify with Nashville's country music heritage and embrace the Nashville Sounds' visual identity. - unsourced.
- are located on the straightaway center field wall and on each side of the backstop. - unsourced.
- Walking vendors also traverse the stadium selling canned soft drinks and beer, water, peanuts, Cracker Jack, and other easily toted items. - yes, occurs at most stadiums, but still, unsourced here.
- Ground rules - in this sect, unclear if the in-line citation applies just to first sentence, or all of that sect.
- Quite an excellent job with referencing and use of in-line citations, throughout the article, very well done here.
- Recommend posting to WP:GOCE to request a copyedit from the WikiProject Guild of Copy Editors.
- Suggest placing neutrally-worded notice to talk pages of relevant WikiProjects linking to this Peer Review and asking for additional comments.
- NOTE: Please respond, below entire set of comments, and not interspersed throughout, thanks!
I see quite a lot of research and effort has gone into this. Quite well done so far. Good luck, — Cirt (talk) 23:22, 19 October 2015 (UTC)
- @Cirt: Thanks for your input! I think I've addressed most of your concerns with the exception of a copyedit, seeking additional comments from others, and these:
- 3: I realize most (or all) articles from The Tennessean show as registration required, but one can view all of these articles in their entirety without registering provided they haven't reached the free view limit.
- 16: The reference does refer to the entire section. I'm not sure if there's a better way to indicate this. (?)
- Thanks, again. NatureBoyMD (talk) 16:43, 27 October 2015 (UTC)
- 16: Suggest having cites at ends of each line, instead of top of sect. Good job, — Cirt (talk) 16:45, 27 October 2015 (UTC)
- Done. Thanks. NatureBoyMD (talk) 16:47, 27 October 2015 (UTC)
- 16: Suggest having cites at ends of each line, instead of top of sect. Good job, — Cirt (talk) 16:45, 27 October 2015 (UTC)