Wikipedia:Peer review/Father Ted/archive1

Father Ted

AFAIK everythings in there, it just doesnt seem quite right. --PopUpPirate 00:32, 8 February 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Hmm, that's a good summary. I fixed a smegging disambig, and linked ecumenical (I always wondered what an ecumenical matter was...) Andjam 11:01, 8 February 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I would add a second para to the intro describing the show beyond just the setting, something like "the show followed the life of a colorful priest and his wacky hijinks," for example, and mentioning something notable about it (the section about neologisms is a good candidate). Kaisershatner 17:04, 8 February 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Ta, makes sense, I'll implement --PopUpPirate 20:06, 8 February 2006 (UTC)[reply]

The article requires references, especially for the "Production details" section. It appears the links in the "Ext. links" section were used to write the article (if so put those in a "References" section). Specifically, look for sources that provide critical reviews, analysis and commentary of the show or source that provide details about how/why the show was created, evolved, and ended. maclean25 19:19, 8 February 2006 (UTC)[reply]

References will definitely be needed, will implement later, thanks --PopUpPirate 20:06, 8 February 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I agree with Maclean in that I'd perfer to see less of a character summary and more about the success of the show itself. Some quotes from the show's creator or actors about the show would be a start.
Also, try to avoid opinions, which slip through. "The word's strength is debatable", "...it is a rich irony...", "She must once have been married", "Somewhat controversially, RTÉ initially did not buy the rights to broadcast the show in Ireland, perhaps for fear of offending more conservative viewers" -- examples such as this sound more opinion than fact.
The article as it reads now is more of a character summary. The character descriptions are lumped together and jump randomly from sentence to sentence, i.e. "Father Ted once described the Great Wall of China as being 'so big it can be seen from anywhere in the world'" appears out of place in Ted’s summary, since it doesn’t go with the sentence before or after and really doesn’t describe Ted. Is that statement because he’s dumb, witty, sarcastic, etc.?
Finally, the article needs a copy edit, as it's a very wordy article. That means the boring stuff; punctuation, grammar, and wordiness.
I hope that helps you. As a fan of the show, I wish you the best in your article. --Ataricodfish 06:44, 10 February 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Cheers, there's a lot of work to do but I intend to make a proper go of it!! --PopUpPirate 20:18, 10 February 2006 (UTC)[reply]

There is room for a sentence or two more on the shooting locations. Not sure exactly what should be added, it would just be nice to have more than a quickie listing without some specifics or description. youngamerican (talk) 04:23, 12 February 2006 (UTC)[reply]