Wikipedia:Peer review/Encyclopædia Britannica/archive2

The family of Britannica articles has expanded significantly since its last peer review, as may be seen from the new category Category:Encyclopædia Britannica. New pages have been created on the History of the Encyclopædia Britannica, Propædia, Macropædia, Micropædia, Staff of the Encyclopædia Britannica, Bicentennial of the Encyclopædia Britannica, Dobson's Encyclopædia and numerous biographical articles. It would be helpful to get advice on how to improve this article before submitting it to FAC; thanks! Willow 21:36, 27 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, APR _t 00:13, 1 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

"History of Editions" reads somewhat like a list and could probably flow better -- but that's a fairly vague criticism.
You might want to rework the treatment of systemic bias; the language as it's written now is wishy-washy. Instead of using terms like "seems" and "presumably", I would mention the critic by name -- "Kister identifies a systemic bias..." or something. (Unless it's original research, in which case it should be removed.)
"Staff" contains another "presumably".
Whether Britannica does or does not contain an entry on Wikipedia seems irrelevant, especially under the "Competition" section.

In general, looks pretty comprehensive. Good luck with FAC. -- bcasterline • talk 04:22, 1 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]