Wikipedia:Peer review/Empires of Eve/archive1

Empires of Eve

I really want to take this article to GA status. I need exact advice on all the steps to take to make it reach GA. Don't be general either, be very specific. Please help me.

Thanks, JC7V (talk) 02:35, 3 January 2019 (UTC)

Comments by ImmortalWizard

• The game met his criterion for uniqueness because of its focus on causation. What is causation? Could be wikilinked?
• I will come with more comments but overall, the article looks to be written for gaming experts. It should be understandable by the general audience.

Comments by Colin M

Some questions I'm left with as I read this article:

• Is this book a novel?
• Is this book based on real events that happened between players of the game?
• Is Andrew Groen a game journalist? Does his journalism focus on some other specific domain?

Other thoughts:

• This sentence in the first paragraph is confusing "Groen's book illustrates the in-universe aspect of the game.". First of all, at this point in the article, it makes me wonder if the word "illustrates" is being used literally (does it have pictures?). But also, I just don't know what "the in-universe aspect of the game" means.
• The "Synopsis" section could use some more context. e.g. one paragraph begins Groen then covers the founding of Ascendant Frontier. What's "Ascendant Frontier"? This is the first time that phrase is mentioned in the article.
• Groen promoted Eve Online within the game, in keeping with the book's theme. Should this say Groen promoted Empires of Eve within the game? Colin M (talk) 04:38, 1 March 2019 (UTC)