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Emma Willard

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I've listed this article for peer review because I have been working on this article for my U.S. Women's History class and would appreciate any suggestions or comments because I am new to Wikipedia. I would like to make sure that there are no grammatical errors, formatting issues and that overall the article is sufficient.

Thanks, Kaliwhitney (talk) 00:41, 13 December 2011 (UTC)

Comments

• Lead is a little short, take a look at WP:LEAD for advice on how long it should be and what it should contain (e.g. a summary of the major points of the article).
• No images at all you could include?
• Probably more logical to link women's rights activism than American.
• Link Troy Female Seminary first time.
• Section headings should follow WP:HEAD, so things like "Early Life" should be "Early life".
• Is there a good link for New York Legislature? Yes, there is but you should link it the first time you use it rather than later on.
• Last para of Career section is entirely unreferenced.
• Last part of Marriage and Family (should be family) is unreferenced.
• " in 1839.[8] [4]" order them numerically and remove the space between them.
• No need to link Europe, most of our readers will know what that means without a link.
• A lot of Later Life (should be Later life) is unreferenced.
• Bare URLs in the references need to be fixed.
• Ref 7, page range needs to use an en-dash (see WP:DASH).
• Same for ref 11.
• Last "External link" is really an external link as it doesn't link to anything.

For someone who is new to Wikipedia, well done, just some technical details you need to fix. All the best. The Rambling Man (talk) 15:20, 18 December 2011 (UTC)