Wikipedia:Peer review/Egyptian temple/archive1
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I've improved this article about as much as I can on my own. Now I need someone to else to examine it and make sure it's ready for (gulp) FAC.
Thanks, A. Parrot (talk) 19:36, 16 March 2011 (UTC)
The Land
[edit]This is a really amazing article, very well done! It's detailed, well-researched, well-structure and well-written and basically at FA standard. Even the dashes are used correctly. My only comments are...
- The lead section is a bit long; can anything be removed or cut down? It's not that there is anything irrelevant or repetitive in it, but I think it would work a bit better shorter.
- I trimmed it a little, but on a subject with so many important aspects I don't want to cut too much. In any case, the lead length is similar to that of FAs of comparable length.
- The images could do with alt text (seems very finickity, but it's very important for blind people and is inevitably raised at FA)
- I'd like to add alt text, but not even the people working on the alt text guideline can agree how it should be written (see the talk page there). I'm leery of doing anything when the rules are that confused.
- It's probably the case that something is better than nothing.
- I'd like to add alt text, but not even the people working on the alt text guideline can agree how it should be written (see the talk page there). I'm leery of doing anything when the rules are that confused.
- Is there any scope for a little more use of further information links and in-text wikilinks? Do articles exist, for instance, on the Egyptian priesthood or animal cults? Could terms like Nubia and mummy do with linking where they appear?
- I linked "mummy" and several other terms (and I can't believe I forgot to link "Nubia"), but for a lot of others there would be no point; the articles don't exist. The Egypt project is terribly anemic, and articles on Egyptian priesthood, oracles, animal cults, economy, etc. all have yet to be written. Even this article didn't exist until January. I hope to write some of those articles myself, but not until I have the time and resources to do them properly.
- There's nothing wrong with adding redlinks (at least in my opinion!)
- I linked "mummy" and several other terms (and I can't believe I forgot to link "Nubia"), but for a lot of others there would be no point; the articles don't exist. The Egypt project is terribly anemic, and articles on Egyptian priesthood, oracles, animal cults, economy, etc. all have yet to be written. Even this article didn't exist until January. I hope to write some of those articles myself, but not until I have the time and resources to do them properly.
- The use of commas in "The most important part of the temple was the sanctuary, the focus of its ritual, which typically contained a cult image, a statue of its god" is technically incorrect.
- There was some potential confusion in that sentence, so I cleared it up in the lead-trimming.
Well done once more and I look forward to supporting it when it comes to FAC... The Land (talk) 14:49, 19 March 2011 (UTC)