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Dyscourse

I've been trying to figure out how to improve this article ever since creating this. Making a Peer Review for it might help me out so if feel free to critique the page.

Thanks, GamerPro64 03:24, 5 November 2015 (UTC)

A few thoughts:

• psychological links to psychology, not a genre
• "60.80" 60 minutes and 48 seconds? Or do you mean something like "between 60 and 80 minutes"?
• "It received average reviews from video game critics." I'm not sure "average" is the right word.
• The latter half of the first paragraph of "gameplay" is apparently unsourced
• I'm not really clear on what you're talking about in the second paragraph of "gameplay". You're yet to introduce traveling with a map, and the role of days is not explained
• "founder Alex Schwartz" Founder of what?
• Your reception section is rather light; could you not beef it a little?
• I'm not really sure I'm clear on what the gameplay actually involves. Is this a top-down RPG in the style of (say) Zelda, or is it more of a straightforward "choose your own adventure"? I understand the setting, the PC and the objective, but not what the actual gameplay is like. (Also, perhaps you could give some examples of the kind of choices that the player is asked to make?)

I've done some moderately heavy copyediting; please double-check. Josh Milburn (talk) 18:26, 22 November 2015 (UTC)