Wikipedia:Peer review/Dysart, Fife/archive2
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I've listed this article for peer review because i have done some work on the article since the last time it was nominated. I wonder if my work has been enough to achieve B status? I don't think i'm there yet.
Thanks, Kilnburn (talk) 20:26, 21 December 2008 (UTC)
Comments from Jolly Janner
[edit]- Lead
- The first sentence refers to it as a district, but the second sentence jumps in with "The town...". It would be better to call it a "district and town" in the first sentence.
- "to the east of Kirkcaldy" how far east (in miles and kilometres)?
- I often see articles about settlements refering to the geography in the first paragrph of the lead. I think a mention that it is on the coast wouldn't go a miss.
- "Following the death of the town's harbour" do harbours die? I think words like "closure" or "decline" are more appropriate.
- "saw large parts of the antique town" I think "historical" would be a better word than "antique" and again in the next sentence, unless that's what it's called localy.
- "Nowadays, the town retains an individual character" I think "today" would be a better word than "nowadays", but how does it retain an individual character?
- Low Countries is wikilinked twice in the lead.
I'll try and do the rest later. Jolly Ω Janner 01:33, 23 December 2008 (UTC)
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