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Dulquer Salmaan

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I've listed this article for peer review because I plan to make this a good article and would like some constructive advice.

Thanks a lot, JosephJames 07:57, 17 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Redtigerxyz's comments

Comparing with GA Shahid Kapoor

This article is a WP:QUOTEFARM. Use the quotes even if the same can not be said by a paraphrase.
The text is repetitive in some places: "He next starred in Anwar Rasheed's Ustad Hotel (2012) in which he starred alongside Thilakan and Nithya Menen".
State the following facts about each of his roles: Film name, year, 1-liner summary of his character and the plot, any special efforts to essay the character (e.g. "For the role, he shaved his head and learned to speak in a Kashmiri dialect" from Shahid article), reviews, commercial success/fail, awards.
"becoming the first ever actor to receive the award two times in the same category" is not supported by the reference.
Each reference should have this minimum info: Author, date, Web link (if any), Publisher/Newspaper (e.g. The Hindu).
- Example where missing: "Anchu Sundarikal Movie Review". The Times Of India.
Not sure if filmbeat.com is a RS.--Redtigerxyz ^Talk 11:25, 19 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the comment Redtigerxyz! I am working on it. Could you give me other instances where the text is repetitive? Also, I believe Filmibeat is a reliable source. It was used in Loham. Expecting your help further. JosephJames 13:41, 19 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Repetitive text examples:
- "Dulquer's performance was appreciated"
- "was a commercial failure/success"
"The film garnered critical acclaim and became Dulquer's fifth consecutive commercial success in two years"; 2 problems:
- "fifth consecutive commercial success in two years" is not supported by ref
- The ref only talks about week 1 collections, which can be used to proclaim it a hit overall.--Redtigerxyz ^Talk 17:37, 19 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Redtigerxyz: Sorry that I couldn't attend to your comments. I am having some network issues. Could you please help me in improving the article by editing it? I hadn't noticed the repetitive text and the overuse of quotes earlier. I hope you can help me. JosephJames 04:44, 23 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Charles Turing

In the entire article, the actor is referred by the name "Dulquer", it has to be his last name "Salmaan".
The 3rd para in the lead is the continuation of 2nd. Is it necessary to divide them.
In the body, "Dulquer" is used in a number of times in every para, instead of his/he/him.
Lead reads: he "predominantly appears in Malayalam films". Then why there is a column for language in filmography. The only two Tamil credits can be moved to Notes.
You removed the In the media section citing as just random info. If it was about the placement, then you can re-add that under "Awards" (as prose), changing the title as "Awards and recognitions".
Keep a uniform referencing style. Some references are missing date and author.
Article should go through a copyedit from WP:GOCE.

--Charles Turing (talk) 14:57, 24 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Charles Turing! A few suggestions though. I think the language column in the filmography should be kept. The info in the 'In the media' section is tough to add into the "Awards" section. I think it can be added later maybe. I am working on the references. JosephJames 14:44, 25 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for yor comments. I'm closing the PR. Please feel free to post further suggestions on my talk page. JosephJames 14:39, 28 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]