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Draft Eisenhower movement

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When I first edited this article, I had no intention to take it anywhere except GA. But, here I am, requesting a peer review pre-FAC. This is currently an WikiProject Military history A-class article, also a good article. I have tried to include all major reliable source, keeping the article comprehensive, but concise. Though I do want to take it to FAC, I will do so only if reviewers here agree that (1) it is comprehensive (2) sources are reliable. Appreciate any comments. Thanks – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 12:31, 17 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Gog the Mild

I have done a little copy editing. Revert or query anything you don't like.
- Everything seems fine to me! – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 04:56, 19 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"issued an internal memo at Columbia University for release". "internal memo" and "for release" seem contradictory to me.
- Removed 'internal', because it was indeed for release. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 04:56, 19 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"who had later bolted the Democratic nomination". 1. Would this read better if "had" was removed? 2. What does "bolted" mean in this context? (Is it US English?)
- (1) Removed had (2) Reworded 'bolted' to 'walked out' – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 04:56, 19 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"called and encouraged Eisenhower to run". "called" as in 1. visited 2. telephoned 3. publicly called for? I think we should be told.
- That a really good question. Scanning through the book and newspapers, it appears to me that Thurmond publicly called for Ike's nomination. Specified in the article. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 04:56, 19 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

That's all I have. Fine work indeed. Gog the Mild (talk) 19:16, 18 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Gog, thanks a lot for c/e and comments. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 04:56, 19 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

TheTechnician27

Before a first reading, I wanted to point out that those url-access=limited parameters on NYT Times Machine citations should be set to 'subscription'. While one paragraph is accessible subject to limited access, the full text is unavailable to those who aren't subscribers: "Full text is unavailable for this digitized archive article. Subscribers may view the full text of this article in its original form through TimesMachine." Per Template:Cite news, 'subscription' should be used when: "the source as a whole is only accessible via a paid subscription with the provider of the source ("paywall"), even if a limited preview, abstract or review may still be available without subscription" TheTechnician27 (Talk page) 21:34, 2 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Done. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 06:23, 3 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@TheTechnician27, if you wish to continue the review, please do the same on the FAC page. I though it would be better to just go ahead. Thanks! – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 18:31, 6 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]