Wikipedia:Peer review/Dominic Keegan/archive1

Dominic Keegan

I've listed this article for peer review because I am planning to send this article to GAN. I would like some pointers towards achieving that goal (if it is achievable), along with some specific opinion on how should I write about the lede or Keegan's 2020 season.

Thanks, NotReallySoroka (talk) 11:43, 11 August 2022 (UTC)

I think this article is not close to GA. First off, the subject is 22 years old. He's playing in the Florida Complex League. It's not impossible to have a GA on a minor league player, but it will always be a negative because there is so much career to come (one would think). In subjects so young and nascent, there's often not enough content or sourcing. This article is fairly short at 2951 bytes of prose and has only 12 unique citations, and five of them (B-Ref, MLB.com profile, Vanderbilt athletics profile, and two from Pointstreak) are not in-depth coverage. The Kevin Parada semifinalist article may also be a passing mention, but I haven't checked.

That said, the biggest problem I see here is WP:PROSELINE writing with one sentence paragraphs in the "College career" section: "In x time, y happened". In the 2020 season, cancelled due to the COVID-19 pandemic in the United States, Keegan appeared in nine games, making eight starts. is unclear. If the season is cancelled, how did he play? (I know that it's games he played before the cancellation, but this is unclear.) Also, committing to Vandy is mentioned twice in the two-sentence paragraph about decommitting from Virginia Tech. I would want to see more college stats in this paragraph.

"Personal life" is usually a title of a section to detail a person's adult life, like marriage/kids, other personal endeavors. In this article, it should read "Early life". The blood clot may be "Personal life" rather than "career", and can go after the career part. I'm not sure if there's guidance against the "Professional career" section having text in the level two header and then having a level three header, but at the very least I don't think it reads well.

Other small points: runs batted in should be abbreviated as "RBIs", not "RBI", since it is plural. The abbreviation CCBL is given without being presented on the first use and linkage of the Cape Cod Baseball League.

I suggest waiting until at least next season, maybe waiting until he's in the majors or his career stalls out in the minors. – Muboshgu (talk) 18:04, 20 September 2022 (UTC)

@NotReallySoroka: To ensure they saw the above comments. I agree with Muboshgu and suggest that either new sources are found, or let this player's career play out for a couple years before nominating it for a GAN. Z1720 (talk) 00:15, 7 October 2022 (UTC)

Thank you for your thoughtful replies. NotReallySoroka (talk) 02:43, 8 October 2022 (UTC)