Wikipedia:Peer review/Dolphinarium/archive1

Dolphinarium

Especially want opinions on references and neutrality (mainly looking at the animal welfare aspect). English is not my native language, so a critical look at spelling and grammar is also appreciated. Have done a lot of work on the article, and it is currently the selected article on the Cetaceans portal. I hope to get it to "Good Article" status at least. BabyNuke 20:34, 10 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I've given it a quick copyedit, but it could do with another pass as I mainly removed redundancy rather than rewriting.
It's let down badly by lack of inline citation - with a topic like this inline citations help counter arguments of bias (and make you think about the statements you make)
Try to avoid 'it is claimed','some people say', 'this is disputed' etc. - give specific examples or don't include the claims.
Some defense of dolphinariums by owners or organizations (if there is any) may help balance the article.
The "suicide" section is very POV at the moment - I'd try to decribe the actions of the dolphin without attributing the action directly (unless you have reliable quotable sources to back up the claims)
You should standardize on a capitalization scheme for the common names of the species - Wikipedia:WikiProject Cetaceans probably has a policy on this.

Hope this helps Yomangani ^talk 01:18, 11 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your comments and edits! I will work on the points mentioned. BabyNuke 09:41, 11 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Automated suggestions are provided here, that you may wish to refer for some useful style guidelines. - Mailer Diablo 17:27, 12 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]