Wikipedia:Peer review/Delrina/archive1

Delrina

Self-nomination. Name of the firm that was best known for producing WinFax software, prior to it being bought out by Symantec ten years ago this month. An influential Canadian software company with a lot of interesting history. Have built this article to what I think is approaching Feature Article quality, but would like it peer reviewed.

Would like to know:

what is it missing?
does anybody care about the firms financials? Would that be useful info to throw in?
does a non-encyclopedic POV intrude in terms of tone or voice?
what would make it better?

Also, go easy on the requests for additional images -- after 10 years it is surprisingly hard to come up with relevant box shots/screenshots, etc. Captmondo 15:31, 1 November 2005 (UTC)[reply]

just one thing, the red links in the opening paragraph dont look great Astrokey44 14:18, 2 November 2005 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for mentioning that -- will plug those gaps as soon as I am able to. Captmondo 17:18, 2 November 2005 (UTC) Now done. Captmondo 15:21, 3 November 2005 (UTC)[reply]

I made a few copy edits to this article, & hope that made the text flow more smoothly. I didn't think that the tone of voice in the present version intruded at all. Wikipedia must be having some problems because I couldn't view some of the images,for example that "About" screen capture, but if it does show the pictures of the programmers, then it would be quite a prize: an old easter egg!

As an OT personal note, that does explain something about one of my first jobs in the computer industry, as a phone tech. At the time I supported PC Tools (which had been bought by Symantec & was effectively EOLed); next to our group were the 2 guys who supported WinFax LITE (also EOLed). This article shows that all of us were working under a contract Corporate Software (which later became Stream) with Symantec. -- llywrch 17:49, 3 November 2005 (UTC)[reply]

Not bad, but there are too many red links throughout the article, are the external links also references?, the company infobox could be a possible thing to add (see an example of the company infobox in good use on Microsoft or IBM) Looking good so far, keep it up. — Wackymacs 10:53, 6 November 2005 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the company infobox suggestion -- duly added (though I note there is little support in this format for companies which no longer exist). Will start working on the remaining dead links. And yes, many of the external links are also references -- is that a problem? Captmondo 15:22, 6 November 2005 (UTC)[reply]

That looks a lot better. I asked about the references because the title of that section was wrong. I have changed it to 'External links and References'. The company infobox looks good. Once the red links are gone, this might just qualify to become a featured article, but I think too many sentences are too short. — Wackymacs 15:28, 6 November 2005 (UTC)[reply]

Have spent the necessary work "plugging the holes" so to speak with many of the formerly dead links from the Delrina main article page, as suggested. This includes links to the company's former principles, such as Bert Amato, Mark Skapinker, Tony Davis and Dennis Bennie; descriptive links (and screenshots!) of some of the products not already covered off, like Cyberjack, TalkWorks and WinComm. There's a few more to go, but they will be tackled shortly. Will beef up the main Delrina article with additional info tomorrow (or soon-ish at any rate) in the hope that I can overcome the "short sentence" problem you refer to -- which I assume means that the article is a bit too thin on detail at times (right?).