Wikipedia:Peer review/Cook Island Aquatic Reserve/archive1
This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I want to bring it to good article status. The main objective of this peer review is to meet the good article criteria, specifically "addresses the main aspects of the topic", I ask you how can this criterion be addressed (should a section, with limited content, named "Geography and geology" or similiar be made?)
Thanks! Alex Douglas (talk) 06:22, 6 September 2009 (UTC)
Finetooth comments: This is an interesting article with nice images. It's not broad enough yet to qualify as a good article, and the prose could use a bit of polish here and there. Here are some suggestions:
- I would suggest including mention of the Cook Island Aquatic Reserve by name and including its dimensions, rules, and a bit of its history.
- You might consider using Template:Geobox/type/nature instead of the island infobox. The geoboxes seem to me to be more versatile. For example, a "protected area" geobox such as the one for Mendip Hills can accommodate an image as well as a map or maps. The geobox template also provides a kind of reminder of possible categories of information that might be added. (Some of the categories clearly don't apply to particular articles and can simply be deleted from the geobox to keep things uncluttered.)
- A map of the reserve and island showing its location in relation to the coast of New South Wales would be helpful.
- Cook Island Aquatic Reserve might be a better title than Cook Island, New South Wales since the reserve includes the island.
- It would be helpful to mention the nearest big population center and its distance and direction from the island.
- I think the main text as well as the infobox should mention the island's size (length, width, shape), and it would be good to include the elevation of its high point. Climate data (temperatures, precipitation, humidity, amount of sunshine) could be interesting.
- It would probably be possible to add some geological data to the article. What kind of rock does the island consist of? How did the island get to where it is? Is it part of the same tectonic plate as the mainland? How deep is the water surrounding the island? If the water is shallow, is it shallow all the way to the mainland? Did a land bridge ever connect the island to the mainland?
- Should anything be added about reefs?
- The "History" section might be slightly better if re-organized chronologically. It starts now with 1770, moves to 1823, then back to the 16th century, then leaps forward to 2008, then back to 1998, then forward to 2004. Also, did anything of note happen between 1823 and 1998? Were the surrounding waters ever fished or overfished?
- "The marine surrounding Cook Island contains a wide variety of fish species... " - "Marine" is used in this way twice more in the last section and also in the lead ("the surrounding marine") as a substitute for "sea" or "ocean" or the more verbose "marine area". I don't recall seeing it used like this before. Would "ocean" or "sea" or "water" be better here and elsewhere?
- Measurements given in metric units should also be given in imperial units. Thus "located six hundred metres" should really say, "located 600 metres (2,000 ft)". I like using the {{convert}} template for these. You can see how I did this one by viewing this comment in edit mode. The template is capable of handling all sorts of measurements and spells and abbreviates them correctly.
- Tweed River in the "History" section links to a disambiguation page rather than the intended target.
- It's often helpful to look at FA articles for ideas about how other editors have solved similar problems. A list of geographical FAs can be found at WP:FA#Geography and places. The list includes the Isle of Portland and other islands. Although none is exactly like Cook Island, there's bound to be quite a lot of category overlap.
I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog. That is where I found this one. Finetooth (talk) 17:17, 11 September 2009 (UTC)