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Consequentialism

I have been working on this article for a couple of months with some helpful edits by others, but I feel that the page may too much reflect my own vision of what an article of consequentialism should be (not that this article is my POV, I hope). I would appreciate any comments, but particularly on any major areas I have overlooked. Any suggestions? Ig0774 01:25, 10 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Leads need expansion badly.
It's possible that an article series template is appropriate. You might want to look in related article to see if there is one.
there is no apparent reason for the John Stuart Mill picture to be where it is.

Circeus 01:24, 17 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Overall: massive improvement on previous version; great stuff; I'd make my students read this.
Balance, structure and length: good. Future editors should try to keep topic additions in offshoot articles rather than adding to this one.
Style: occasionally woffly or epic, but that happens to me too when I write too much. Some rephrasing and sharpening might be good at a number of points.
Opening definition: possibly add a couple of sentences to say what consequentialism is not, as well as what it is (e.g. distinguish briefly from deontology and virtue ethics).
Mill picture: keep until something better comes along.
Too many references to Peter Singer? The 3rd time isn't really necessary.

Caravaca 08:20, 30 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]