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Connie Talbot

I've listed this article for peer review because I feel it is around good article level, and wondered if anyone had comments before I nominate. I started editing the article because I had followed Britain's Got Talent, then started referencing it to adhere to WP:BLP concerns that were raised. I then realised I had started it, so I may as well 'finish' it, and so wrote it up to the current standard. I have no specific concerns, but any comments anyone has are extremely welcome. Thanks, J Milburn (talk) 15:57, 26 December 2007 (UTC)

Since the nomination, I have nominated for good article status. Comments are still very welcome, and it will probably be a while until it is reviewed anyway, due to the backlog. J Milburn (talk) 17:18, 3 January 2008 (UTC)

Review by DrKiernan

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• I would shift the fair use image, to the top right corner of the article, inside the infobox.^[?]
  •  Not done An image in the infobox would have to be a free image. The fair use image is specifically to show what she looked like during Britain's Got Talent. There has already been a fair fuss about that image, and it's really going to have to stay where it is to comply with our fair use rules. I have contacted someone (not sure if it is a webmaster, publicist or whatever) and requested a free picture, so fingers crossed! J Milburn (talk) 18:37, 28 December 2007 (UTC)
• Please add {{persondata|PLEASE SEE [[WP:PDATA]]!}} along with the required parameters to the article - see Wikipedia:Persondata for more information.^[?]
  •  Done J Milburn (talk) 18:37, 28 December 2007 (UTC)
• Per Wikipedia:Context and Wikipedia:Build the web, years with full dates should be linked; for example, if 15 January, 2006 appeared in the article, link it as 15 January, 2006.^[?]
  •  Done J Milburn (talk) 18:37, 28 December 2007 (UTC)
• As per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (dates), dates shouldn't use ^th; for example, instead of (if such appeared in the article) using 30^th January was a great day, use 30 January was a great day.^[?]
  •  Done J Milburn (talk) 18:37, 28 December 2007 (UTC)
• Please ensure that the dates are all in the same format; some are day first, others are month first. For a British-related subject matter, they should all be day first.
  •  Done

Thanks, DrKiernan (talk) 17:56, 28 December 2007 (UTC)

• • Thanks for the review! J Milburn (talk) 18:37, 28 December 2007 (UTC)

Skeeker

I've never reviewed anything before so I'm not sure if I missed anything important, but, the only thing I can see that should be fixed is: "show singing The Wizard of Oz's "Somewhere Over The Rainbow".[3]", the link to "Somewhere Over The Rainbow" is a redirect, maby put this in place: "[[Over the Rainbow|Somewhere Over the Rainbow]]". I'm not sure if redirects are bad, but I personally like the original link, and the T in "The" shouldn't by capitalised. I hope I can help a little, I've never reviewed before this, but it is an interesting article and looks good.
Thank you,
Burningclean _{[Speak the truth!]} 03:31, 30 December 2007 (UTC)

• •  Done Fixed to correct, and correctly formatted, title. Thanks for the review! J Milburn (talk) 14:07, 30 December 2007 (UTC)

M3tal H3ad

• but was eventually beaten by - no need for "eventually" (redundant!)and i don't like the word "but", how about - although was beaten by...
  •  Done J Milburn (talk) 13:59, 2 January 2008 (UTC)
• she was signed temporarily with Sony BMG, but the label then dropped her. - saying temporarily and being dropped by the label is redundant?
  •  Done Removed "temporarily". J Milburn (talk) 13:59, 2 January 2008 (UTC)
• which was released November 26, 2007 in the UK. - released on November...?
  •  Done J Milburn (talk) 13:59, 2 January 2008 (UTC)
• The first single from the album, "Over the Rainbow"/"White Christmas", has been released, saying a single is released is redundant
  •  Done That comes from the fact information was added as it was published. J Milburn (talk) 13:59, 2 January 2008 (UTC)
• "lost out" doesn't give the encyclopedic vibe
  •  Done J Milburn (talk) 13:59, 2 January 2008 (UTC)
• "£1 million-link the pound or euro? sign
  •  Done J Milburn (talk) 13:59, 2 January 2008 (UTC)
• Simon Cowell is linked twice closely and his fullname is used twice in succession
  •  Done J Milburn (talk) 13:59, 2 January 2008 (UTC)
• Rainbow Recording Company, an offshoot of record label Rhythm Riders made specifically for Connie,[2] was due to release Connie's first album on November 26, 2007,[9] and it was later reported that the album was named Over the Rainbow, and the first single, "Over the Rainbow"/"White Christmas", was due to be released on December 3, 2007. This is one sentence :O suggest splitting after November 26, 2007
  •  Done J Milburn (talk) 13:59, 2 January 2008 (UTC)
• November 16, 2007. full date need linking
  •  Done J Milburn (talk) 13:59, 2 January 2008 (UTC)
• was certified Gold in early - I'm not sure here but should "gold" be capitalized?
  •  Done Though I have linked to this article, I have realised that I should be linking to the British equivilent, here, and the BPI doesn't capitalise on its website, so I will remove the capitalisation. J Milburn (talk) 13:59, 2 January 2008 (UTC)
• on This Morning - on the daytime television show This Morning, just like the nightclub thing with Metallica ;p
  •  Done I suppose that's fine, as I had linked to the programme above. J Milburn (talk) 13:59, 2 January 2008 (UTC)
• is the same song that she sang at her grandmother's funeral.
  •  Done J Milburn (talk) 13:59, 2 January 2008 (UTC)
• Over The Rainbow links to Over the Rainbow
  •  Done Skeeker mentioned that, seems I missed the discog section... J Milburn (talk) 13:59, 2 January 2008 (UTC)
• Categories in alphabetical order
  •  Done That's never occurred to me... J Milburn (talk) 13:59, 2 January 2008 (UTC)

You should of left me a message on my talk page ;p M3tal H3ad (talk) 05:39, 2 January 2008 (UTC)

• • I will next time! Thanks very much for the review. J Milburn (talk) 13:59, 2 January 2008 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch

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  • Read it, but it didn't help much. Dates are fine, working on an image and have had a few people read through it. J Milburn (talk) 11:48, 5 January 2008 (UTC)