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Coffee

I've been working on this article, and I'd like to nominate it for GA sometime. It failed two FA nominations (in 2005 and 2006) and one GA nomination (in 2006). Any suggestions for improvement would be appreciated. --Jude. 22:40, 24 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Hi! The article looks nice, and the current structure and sources are useful material if you want to go to GAC. However, the frist objection is that entire sections are blatant copyvios. You can't copy and paste from other websites (or from anywhere); althought you need sources, you have to interpret them in your own words. Then there's the images: While images are good, they might be a little heavy in the article, distracting the reader from the text. Maybe you can try putting a few in the reception section; images in the body of the article should always be informative as to the section they illustrate. Also, as per WP:MOS, captions are preferred in the form of a sentence, as in "a coffee house in damascus"---->"Coffee houses are a popular meeting place in Damascus".

That's about it. Keep at it, and happy editing!--SidiLemine 18:59, 25 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review! I've cut down on the images, and fixed the captions. Sorry about the copyvios. I didn't copy-and-paste them, but I didn't think to check the information that was already in the article when I started on it. I'll fix that now. Cheers, Jude. 23:19, 25 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

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You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, DrKiernan 14:56, 26 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]