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The Civil Air Patrol is one of the lesser-known federal/military organizations in the United States, yet they have contributed a great deal of time, energy, and volunteer manpower in emergency services (such as search and rescue) and other associated activities. This article, once completely refined, may very well be one of the best Wikipedia featured article candidates around, for it would be very educational on a lesser-known subject as well as exemplify a great Wiki. Linuxbeak 01:49, Apr 28, 2005 (UTC)
- A few style suggestions, expand the introduction, there are lots of bullet point lists, like the organization section and the cadet program - where possible turn them into paragraphs. --nixie 11:23, 28 Apr 2005 (UTC)
- Hi nixie; thanks a lot for the review. Sorry for not putting my reply to you right away; I got carried away with editing the history section. I have taken what you said and will correct what needs to be corrected. Linuxbeak 16:27, May 1, 2005 (UTC)
- Hey, Linuxbeak, awesome History section, now you've expanded it! But when I copyedited it a little, I'm afraid I must have misunderstood the chronology and the chain of events with the sandbag bombing guy, and changed it all wrong—I didn't realize December 7, 1941, was Pearl Harbor day—I just noticed it in one of your references, forget which one—surely THAT was the cause of the grounding of civil aircraft on the 8, not Johnson's "bombing" (which was when, exactly?). Uh, you don't in fact mention Pearl Harbor at all in the article, do you...? How come? It looks kind of important in that reference. --Bishonen | talk 16:14, 1 May 2005 (UTC)
- Hi Bishonen; well, it is true I didn't mention Pearl Harbor; I suppose I should do that :P. However, civilian aviation actually got grounded twice; once after Pearl Harbor, and the second after the sandbag bombs. I will make a clarification of that. Linuxbeak 16:27, May 1, 2005 (UTC)