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City of Angels (Thirty Seconds to Mars song)

This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to bring it to FA status. The article already underwent a copyediting treatment, all sources and images were fixed and checked through the different FA nominations. At the last FAC, the closing comment suggested that further work should take place outside the FAC process, so I'm looking for any info on what I could improve. All helpful comments are welcome.

Thanks, Earthh (talk) 20:02, 22 February 2015 (UTC)

Comments from SNUGGUMS

This is definitely on its way.....

• Lead only needs to mention promotional single release and earliest single release

• It already mentions its promo release and its digital release.

• I mean to replace November 2013 release with October 25, 2013 release Snuggums (talk / edits) 15:20, 3 March 2015 (UTC)

• Done.--Earthh (talk) 22:05, 3 March 2015 (UTC)

• "who praised the composition and the intimate lyrics; reviewers also complimented Leto's vocals" → "who praised the composition, lyrics, and Leto's vocals"

• Done.

• The MTV VMA nomination ref doesn't include results, so this should be used in place.

• Fixed.

• For Karrang! Awards, this is a better source for nominees, and here is the winners list, where it should be mentioned that Deaf Havana's "Boston Square" won the award

• Done.

• I still don't see what makes "LadyGunn" a professional, high-quality source

• It's an independent magazine. That reference is an interview with Jared Leto. I could remove it if it isn't reliable enough.

• Us Weekly is a gossip magazine and shouldn't be used

• Removed.--Earthh (talk) 14:22, 3 March 2015 (UTC)

That's all I can think of for now Snuggums (talk / edits) 02:31, 3 March 2015 (UTC)