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I've nominated this article for a peer review because I would like to receive necessary feedback that will allow me to further improve this article for submission to a Featured Article review. Any and all guidance would be greatly appreciated! -- Thanks, West Virginian (talk) 21:06, 29 April 2015 (UTC)
Drive-by: Is there any reason why the paras in the lead split like this? I feel they are too stubby and can be merged to a total of three shorter paras, given the article size WP:LEADLENGTH. -Ugog Nizdast (talk) 09:25, 15 May 2015 (UTC)
- Ugog Nizdast, thank you for your suggestion! I've consolidated the paragraphs into three per your suggestion. Please let me know if you have any further guidance for this article. Thanks again! -- West Virginian (talk) 10:19, 15 May 2015 (UTC)
- Comments by Ugog Nizdast
- Images: Captions can be shortened. For example, "The church's north sides" can be shortened to "North side viewed from north lawn". Same can goes for east side and other north side image. "Pictured" is again, redundant.
- Geography and location:"The church and cemetery, located to the east of Christian Church Road, " isn't this already mentioned in the first sentence? all you have to do is add "east" to it rather than mentioning this again. The second para first statement too does this, it mentions "rural agricultural" but also repeats information; do the same there. Then that stubby para can be merged. Makes sense?
- Chapel vs church: I don't know much of this subject, but I assume referring it as a "church" throughtout the article is because majority of the sources say it right?
- I'm fairly sure that per WP:HONORIFIC, "reverand" or "dr" aren't used unless the article title uses it.
- Its affiliation should be mentioned and linked in the lead, see WP:CONTEXTLINK, and maybe even in the infobox if possible.
- Baptist affiliation: in this section, there is an unattributed POV quotation "was described as a man of solemn dignity, warm address and speaks as on..." Quotations should be only used where prose cannot be, and POV quotations need attribution or can be removed if not relevant. -Ugog Nizdast (talk) 10:48, 19 May 2015 (UTC)
- Ugog Nizdast, thank you again for your guidance and suggestions. I've addressed each of these in the article, so please let me know if you see any further changes that need to be incorporated. Since the info box template is the NRHP template, there is not a space for the mention of affiliation but I did include its affiliation in the first sentence of the lede. The quote was removed and while it is named a chapel, it serves as a fully-functioning church in the United Methodist Church. The sources also refer to it as a church. Thanks again Ugog! -- West Virginian (talk) 08:21, 20 May 2015 (UTC)
- Okay good. I removed a minor text sandwich between images on both sides; I took some liberty in the rearrangement but feel free to change it in case the context doesn't match with the prose. Oh and no need to ping me, I've been watching this since I posted here. More to come maybe in a few days. -Ugog Nizdast (talk) 09:13, 20 May 2015 (UTC)
- Ugog Nizdast, thank you for your rearrangement of the images, and feel free to take as much liberty as you like. I'm looking forward to the rest of your comments and suggestions. -- West Virginian (talk) 08:01, 21 May 2015 (UTC)
- Ugog Nizdast, thank you again for your guidance and suggestions. I've addressed each of these in the article, so please let me know if you see any further changes that need to be incorporated. Since the info box template is the NRHP template, there is not a space for the mention of affiliation but I did include its affiliation in the first sentence of the lede. The quote was removed and while it is named a chapel, it serves as a fully-functioning church in the United Methodist Church. The sources also refer to it as a church. Thanks again Ugog! -- West Virginian (talk) 08:21, 20 May 2015 (UTC)
- Section Baptist affiliation: Can the first para be shortened as it talks about the general Baptist history in West Virginia, nothing about the actual topic at hand? Even that mention of other notable people other than Monroe seem to be like this. If you aren't sure of its relevance, then shorten and merge the first two paras. Just curious, does this section summarise any main page? See WP:SUMMARY and WP:DETAIL for how much coverage. Add a "main" header link if it does or a "further" link if it doesn't directly.
- Ugog Nizdast, I've incorporated your suggestions by deleting some of the superfluous information and merging the first and second paragraphs of the Baptist affiliation section. Please let me know if this requires any additional edits. -- West Virginian (talk) 15:45, 28 May 2015 (UTC)
- " allocated 88 and one-half poles" Add the convert template since this is the unit of measurement. -Ugog Nizdast (talk) 10:53, 28 May 2015 (UTC)
- Ugog Nizdast, as there is no pole conversion algorithm for the Wikipedia convert template, I made the conversion on my own and used the convert template to render the square meters figure. Let me know if this works. Upon further inspection, this was an area measurement and not a linear one. This measurement was rendered at UnitConversion.org and Online Unit Converter Pro. -- West Virginian (talk) 15:45, 28 May 2015 (UTC)
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