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Cantabria

Cantabria is a Spanish and Esperanto language featured article translated to English by the collaborative proyect "Spanish Translation of the Week". This article has been recommended a Peer review, in a FAC discussion, to help prepare for FAC, including work on WP:LEAD, cleaning up listiness, referencing, formatting sources, and other MOS issues (such as the rambling TOC, 500px images and what looks like an oversized infobox). I ask for help mainly in tidying the article and technical hitchs in italics. Thanks. Uhanu 09:49, 14 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

SGGH

The LEAD does need copy editing to improve the flow of the text, to avoid the short bullet point sentences and slightly clunky grammar. For example: "Its capital is the city of Santander." could be incorporated with another sentence and replaced with "... the capital city is Santander". "however Upper Paleolithic is the best represented period, being Cantabria the richest region in the world in archaeological sites from this period." also needs tweaking.
Etymology section needs some citations.
You could remove "Surface area: 5,321 km²" from the geography section, that information is provided in the infobox and having it sitting by itself at the start of the geography section doesn't really look comfortable.
Great images
With the Geography section, possible incorporate the images into the paragraphs to avoid these big gaps?
Demographics, this section is good
History section, that quote doesnt really need cquote tags but could be placed directly in gthe text
A lot of redlinks, have you searched each one through wikipedia to check they don't exist under different names?
The Government and administration section: The... The... The... The... doesn't flow as best as it could.
Institutional symbols, could be incorporated into the text to avoid having so many lists.
Try to avoid continually wikilinking to the same terms, you only need to wikilink things like "autonomous community" once on their first occurance.
There are a huge amount of lists here, it would be good if they could be trimmed down into prose where possible.
Economy and Transportation and communications sections need cites.
Natural resources section: the title suggests it is going to talk about coal or oil, not what appears to be national parks. Possibly incorporate into the geography section?
Culture section, again these lists should preferably be turned into prose, Cuisine section also
Sports section needs cites
The existing citations are all set up well, however the article needs many more of them. By my reckoning we should be looking for (at least) 40 or more citations for this article.
Perhaps, when the lists are changed to proce, you could swap the images alternatively from side to side for asthetic reasons (if you are so inclined, not a big deal really).
Entire article does need coypediting for style and grammar.

Hope these points are helpful. SGGH ^speak! 15:09, 13 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Hope these points help!