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Callisto (moon)

I expanded and referenced this article and it needs peer review before FA nomination. I would appreciate any comments but some language clean up is necessary. Ruslik 13:56, 19 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I agree that language cleanup is needed. In the intro, technical terms (such as spectral signatures, jovian subnebular, slow subsolidus convection) are used, but not wikilinked. They should either be linked or (preferably, I think) simplified, especially as an introduction should provide an accessible overview. The term callistoan is used in the intro, but only explained under "Discovery and naming", and jovian is not explained at all, which might confuse readers unfamiliar with the term. Also, for the article in general, I think contractions should be avoided, especially because they contract so sharply with the scientific tone. Technical terms throughout the article need to be wikilinked. If that's what you meant by the language cleanup that is necessary, sorry for repeating what you already knew. Other than that, the content seems very good, though I'm hardly an expert in astronomy. --Jude. 23:13, 24 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for comments and clean up. I removed many technical terms from the lead and added wikilinks. You comments are specially useful because you are not an expert in astronomy. You can really tell me if this text can be understood by a member of the public. Experts know too much and can't.Ruslik 12:24, 25 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

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You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, DrKiernan 14:16, 26 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]