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Bianca Ryan

Even having been through the WP:FA process three times, I'd very much like some extra eyes on this article before deciding whether to test its FA-worthiness. Thanks in advance to all who offer their thoughts. :) RadioKirk (u|t|c) 00:41, 4 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]

It's a decent article, although it seems a little early in her career to build a conclusive story.

I'd like to see the introduction say a little more about her biography, brief as it is, rather than dwelling on critical praise.
Too many red links. Many of them may not be needed; at least those that are not notable.
Reference before the punctuation: "[5],"
I don't think the "Footnotes" sub-section tag is really necessary in the "References" section. It's considered bad form to only have one sub-section within a section.

Thanks. — RJH (talk) 17:43, 4 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks! I, too think it may be early, but it's quite comprehensive for a new artist. May I make some comments?

From the times I've been through WP:FAC, leads are supposed to briefly describe who the person is and why they're notable; I thought this one nailed it—and still do. ;)

I've often seen FAC comments about the introduction being too brief, so I thought I'd mention it.

The length of the article is the determining factor per WP:LEAD; it will need more there as it grows, certainly. Thanks. :)

I tried to link only to the most likely near-future articles; I'll look it over again. :) (Edit: I believe each is sufficiently notable for its own article in the near future; feel free to point out any with which you disagree, with my thanks.)

My experience has been that too many red links generate issues in the FAC. I'd recommend either setting up suitable stubs, or just removing the link.

That's a good suggestion, thank you.

I've always done ref before punct except at ends of sentences; no one's mentioned it before... ;) (Edit: I just checked four featureds at random—Arrested Development (TV series), Vivien Leigh, Sunset Blvd. (1950 film) and Music of the United States—and all refs follow punct. Now I'm confused... [grin])

Wikipedia:Footnotes#Where_to_place_ref_tags

Okay, following commas and closing parentheses is where I'm not on the same page. ;)

I always wondered about that, but it looked worse without, to me, because they are footnotes. I'll check similar articles, thanks.

I've been slammed for that in a FAC, so I thought I'd make mention. But, otherwise, I have no idea where that is documented. — RJH (talk) 17:54, 5 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Already fixed after a review of other featureds. Anyway, great comments, and thanks again. :) RadioKirk (u|t|c) 18:02, 5 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]

RadioKirk (u|t|c) 17:54, 4 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, AZ _t 22:24, 4 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]