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Beckton Gas Works

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This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because… the article has gone through substantial development by a relatively new editor, and he needs to be given some indication of how his work fits into the wikipedia quality process.

Thanks, Kbthompson (talk) 00:48, 21 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]

The principal editor would benefit from feedback on:

Manual of style issues
Comprehensiveness and relevance - what do people want to see from an article of this type
A plan to move the article forward to Good Article status

Thanks Kbthompson (talk) 09:54, 21 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from MeegsC: A few notes to start, with more to come...

The lead is far too short. It should summarize the basic points of the article.
Eliminate as many 1-2 sentence paragraphs as possible. Can they be expanded, or combined with other paragraph?
Popular culture sections are generally discouraged, but at a minimum, you should convert the list of bullet points into proper paragraphs. And all the items in this section would need in-line referencing.
The assertion that the "Beckton Alps" is the highest artificial hill in London needs a reference.

MeegsC | Talk 11:15, 3 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for that, very useful comments. I'll drawer the editor's attention to the review. cheers Kbthompson (talk) 11:43, 3 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]