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Beach volleyball

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I've listed this article for peer review because the latest change adds a very interesting section about Beach Volleyball's origins being in Hawaii. However, it lacks sources/citations for that claim. I'm not sure how to specifically tagging a section as needing citations/sources. Deleting the whole addition for lack of reference source(s) seems a bit harsh.

Thanks, naturist (talk) 19:20, 4 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from White Arabian Filly

"Olympic discipline"--shouldn't that be Olympic sport?
"Birth" doesn't need to be in quotes.
The section about the sport's beginning could use a {{cn}} citation needed tag, but it'd be better to just find a source.
There doesn't need to be spaces between the words and dashes.
"But the sport's"--sort of awkward to start a sentence with but.
Need references for the whole section on skills. I'd suggest searching Google Books.
"Ire of some athletes". Which athletes?
Muslim could be wikilinked.
"And in fact the weather..." That sounds sort of awkward, find some other way to phrase it.

White Arabian Filly (Neigh) 21:05, 16 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]