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i've listed this article for peer review because i am interested in improving the article to FA status. also, if it gets FA status, the 1989 (album) topic is able to accommodate one more good article to keep its featured topic status, so i should be able to create another article (to add to the topic) (fyi the article is i wish you would, and i found lots of sources). furthermore, it would help me get a featured article under my belt, which i have none (and i tried with outram park mrt station but failed.
thanks, brachy08 (chat here lol) 12:16, 29 June 2024 (UTC)
- Courtesy ping: @Brachy0008 Wuju Daisuki (talk) 23:43, 3 August 2024 (UTC)
- thanks! brachy08 (chat here lol) 11:41, 4 August 2024 (UTC)
- gonna close it now brachy08 (chat here lol) 11:42, 4 August 2024 (UTC)
- thanks! brachy08 (chat here lol) 11:41, 4 August 2024 (UTC)
I have added this article to the FAC PR sidebar. Please consider reviewing the articles listed there. Z1720 (talk) 22:43, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
Wuju Daisuki
[edit]Hi. I did a good article review once and it stressed me out badly, but my passion for reviewing things has not gone yet. Doing peer reviews seems like less responsibility on me than a GAR, so I'm here. (Also I'm thinking about taking a few articles to PR, but I've only been thinking...) Please note that I didn't check most of the references and I'm not too caught up on the featured article criteria, so this probably will be a lot of nitpicking. But if there's one thing about this that's different from GAR, it's that I can nitpick as much as I want. Wuju Daisuki (talk) 21:57, 2 August 2024 (UTC)
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[...]was released to radio as the fourth single to promote 1989[...]
This part sounds a little overlong and awkward to me. Try "A remix featuring the American rapper Kendrick Lamar, with additional lyrics by Lamar and production by Ilya, was released to radio as 1989's fourth promotional single on May 17, 2015, by Big Machine and Republic Records." Still not the best but it's what I could doMusic critics gave the album version of "Bad Blood" mixed reviews; some found it to demonstrate a defiant attitude and deemed it a highlight
Of what? Of 1989, I guess, but I was caught off guard by the jack of "of/from 1989" or "the album" (but the phrase 'the album' is already at the start) Also I think "found it to demonstrate" is a little too fancy for its own goodAlthough NME and PopMatters ranked "Bad Blood" among the best songs of 2015, critics have retrospectively considered it one of Swift's worst songs.
Sounds like a case of WP:DESPITE. I'd separate the positive and retroactive negative reactions into their own sections- Maybe I'm not in the loop w/ Wikipedia's rules on bolding but I don't think the bolding on "Taylor's Version" is necessary
Background and production
On the album's standard edition, Martin and his frequent collaborator Shellback produced 7 out of 13 songs, including "Bad Blood".
Maybe I'm nitpicking too much but this is only sourced to the liner notes. I'm okay w/ the production info being sourced to liner notes but what about the assertion that Shellback is a frequent collaborator of Max Martin?
Music and lyrics
The media widely speculated the subject to be Katy Perry, who had a publicized fallout with Swift after being friends for a few years.
The phrase 'a few years' sounds too informal, consider changing it to 'several years'
Release and commercial performance
In May 2015, a remix version featuring the rapper Kendrick Lamar was released as the fourth single to promote 1989.
The ref is a Billboard article that's just charting stuff, no mention about releasing a remix or anything. I think the "Wiz Khalifa Enters..." would work better for that, though there's not a concrete release date mentioned
Critical reception
Critics who deemed "Bad Blood" a generic song without the trademarks of Swift's songwriting included Mikael Wood from the Los Angeles Times and Andrew Unterberger from Spin[...]
Original research? I suggest a rewrite w/ Wood's remarks that the song was "less distinctive" than her earlier pop songs (keep Unterberger I think)
Music video > Reception
Media publications compared the video's production to that of blockbuster movies and opined that it resembled films and series in the action or sci-fi genres, namely Sin City, RoboCop, Tron, Kill Bill, and Mad Max: Fury Road.
I think this is a little awkward; try "Media publications compared the video's production to that of blockbuster movies and opined that it resembled films and series in the action and sci-fi films such as Sin City, RoboCop, Tron, Kill Bill, and Mad Max: Fury Road." I'm also not a fan of the word opined but eh I let it pass with my "Super Shy" GAR so I can't say anythingSome critics remarked on the video in the context of feminism.
I think "remarked on" is a little bit weird phrasing, maybe try "commented on"
Awards and nominations
At the 2015 MTV Video Music Awards, "Bad Blood" was nominated in eight categories and won in two: Video of the Year and Best Collaboration; it was Swift's first Video of the Year win.
This is fine as two sentences (replace the semicolon with a period)