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Bad Blood (2003)

• A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for September 2008.

This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because after being nominated as a Good Article and fixing the prose, I feel it could meet the FA Criteria. But I also think that it needs a good peer review to avoid any prose issues being brought up at FAC. In all honesty, I feel I wrote this better than SummerSlam (2003) :).

Thanks, S_RX 22:44, 19 September 2008 (UTC)

Giggy

Image comments as requested. Mostly seems fine, just the one thing; what good does having an image of the DVD cover do, and thus, why is it necessary? (It's FUR doesn't help convince me.) Giggy (talk) 23:05, 19 September 2008 (UTC)

How about now?--S_RX 23:16, 19 September 2008 (UTC)

Still not seeing it. The first part of the FUR can be done with text ("there were different people on the covers"). The second part is non-existent, as far as I can see. Giggy (talk) 23:26, 19 September 2008 (UTC)

I just removed it, I will let it get deleted as an orphaned image.--S_RX 23:32, 19 September 2008 (UTC)

ThinkBlue

Resolved comments from ThinkBlue

Background

• Background
  • This is me, but this sounds off ---> "called the Hell in a Cell".
    • Reworded it to "dubbed as the Hell in a Cell match" in the process removing the comma.--S_RX 23:28, 19 September 2008 (UTC)
  • Add a hyphen between "non-physical".
    • Done.--S_RX 23:28, 19 September 2008 (UTC)
• Main event matches
  • "officiate pinfall" is it missing "the"?
    • Done.--S_RX 23:28, 19 September 2008 (UTC)
• Aftermath
  • Shawn did not win the WH title at SummerSlam.
    • I was thinking about Survivor Series (2002). Fixed.--S_RX 23:28, 19 September 2008 (UTC)

Here's my comments. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 23:22, 19 September 2008 (UTC)

Comments from Ealdgyth (talk · contribs)

• You said you wanted to know what to work on before taking to FAC, so I looked at the sourcing and referencing with that in mind. I reviewed the article's sources as I would at FAC.
  • MOS says no all capitals in link titles in references
  • Really picky, but current ref 25, should be seating chart, not seatin chart.

Hope this helps. Please note that I don't watchlist Peer Reviews I've done. If you have a question about something, you'll have to drop a note on my talk page to get my attention. (My watchlist is already WAY too long, adding peer reviews would make things much worse.) 12:56, 22 September 2008 (UTC)

All done.--S_RX 20:37, 22 September 2008 (UTC)

Comments from Juliancolton (talk · contribs)

• All wrestlers were from the Raw brand - a storyline division in which WWE assigned it's employees to a different program, the other being SmackDown!. Change the hyphen to an en dash.

What is the wikicode for an endash? I searched it but couldn't find it.--S_RX 21:00, 25 September 2008 (UTC)

• The contests would include a belching contest, a "pie" eating contest, and a singing contest. Why does "pie" link to Crotch? And why are they eating it in a contest? O_O

I explained that better.--S_RX 21:00, 25 September 2008 (UTC)

• After Sunday Night Heat, the pay-per-view began with a tag team match where the Dudley Boyz (D-Von [Devon Hughes] and Bubba Ray ([Mark LoMonaco]) faced Rodney Mack (Rodney Begnaud) and Christopher Nowinski in a singles match. Confusing. Where does the parenthesis end?

–Juliancolton ^{Tropical Cyclone}

Fixed, there was an extra one.S_RX 21:00, 25 September 2008 (UTC)