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BBC Sports Personality of the Year Coach Award

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I've listed this article for peer review because I am interested in listing this as an FLC, but was advised to get some more feedback as it only just meets the unwritten 10 item minimum rule for lists.

Thanks, Rambo's Revenge (talk) 15:34, 18 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

In the case of a points tie, the person placed first the most is the winner. - this doesn't make sense, needs rewording
- Hopefully clarified. Rambo's Revenge (talk) 22:40, 18 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I would expand the lead by adding dates and notes to the recipients that are noted in the lead. In addition, expanding like the categories.
- I don't understand what you mean. The years won are already noted in the lead for Fergie & Wenger. I have no idea what "expanding like the categories" means. Rambo's Revenge (talk) 22:40, 18 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I would place the notes as separate columns in the table.
- Think I have done your suggestion. Is it better now? Rambo's Revenge (talk) 22:40, 18 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
There is a date formatting problem with Ref #2
- The date formatting problem is caused by {{cite video}}, I have requested a change to it, but it is an {{editprotected}} page. Rambo's Revenge (talk) 22:40, 18 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

S R X 21:30, 18 December 2008 (UTC)

It has been awarded to four Britains, with the five of the other six winners being European. - remove the Done
so the then St Helens captain Paul Sculthorpe collected on his behalf. - comma in between Paul's name. Done
The most recent award was presented in 2008 to David Brailsford, for coaching the British Olympic cycling team to eight gold medals at the 2008 Olympic Games. - no need for a comma. Done
In the lead, what I meant was add a little more to summarize the list. Done
So the notes works as "Rationale for..."? right?
- Yes, is this wrong? I adopted a style similar to that used in this recent FL.
Some of the notes have quotations, others dont, fixing?
- Some of the reasons are given explicitly, others have their achievements described. The ones given explicitly are quoted, the others are summaries of the achievements stated on the BBC website. Does your fixing? comment mean that I might be running in to WP:NOR problems? Rambo's Revenge (talk) 11:05, 19 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  - What I meant was quotation marks. Sorry.--S R X 23:35, 19 December 2008 (UTC)

S R X 01:19, 19 December 2008 (UTC)

It looks better, but I recommend using an alternative template for flags, the one which uses the abbreviation for the country's name, because I do not even know some of those flags.--S R X 16:23, 20 December 2008 (UTC)

Not sure that is necessary, as if you are unsure what a flag represents, you can find out by hovering your mouse over the flag. Rambo's Revenge (talk) 16:40, 20 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Most reviewers bring that up at FLC's, but if you want to keep it, be my guest.--S R X 19:48, 20 December 2008 (UTC)

Thanks for the heads up, however the flags are also accompanied by there full names in the section below, so this hopefull shouldn't be a problem. I'll give it a shot at FLC at least. As it is the only way to really know. Thanks once again for your comments. Rambo's Revenge (talk) 19:53, 20 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]