Wikipedia:Peer review/BBC News 24/archive1

BBC News 24

As a result of a huge amount of hard work, this article has recently been listed as a Good Article after being reviewed. It is my hope now that it can be improved further to become a Featured Article and so I was hoping that I could receive some feedback on where the article can be improved so that myself and all those who have worked hard on this article can get it to featured article status. I would appreciate comments and suggestions and would like to thank you in advance. Wikiwoohoo 21:54, 27 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Trebor

Expand the lead per WP:LEAD, two paragraphs would probably be best, but one long one may suffice.
Get rid of the long lists. I don't want to see a long list of who has presented; perhaps try a précis (in prose) of the most notable ones.
Get rid of the stubby sections and subsections with only a sentence or so in.
Give accessdates on the references.
More thorough referencing is needed, for instance "A key claim by Lord Lambert was that the channel was slow to react to breaking news unlike its competitor Sky News" is dying for a cite.

It's alright, some sections are pretty good and flowing, but it's inconsistent and has long needless lists. A fair bit of work to go until it reaches FA standards. Trebor 02:09, 28 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your suggestions. Regarding the lists of presenters, I have just replaced them with the paragraphs that were in place when I added this article for a peer review. It certainly is much better to have paragraphs rather than lists! Thanks for your help. Wikiwoohoo 14:56, 28 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, APR _t 15:49, 28 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]