Wikipedia:Peer review/Arminianism/archive1

Arminianism

Self-nomination. I spent a lot of time researching, writing, editing, rewriting, etc. to see this article come about. I spent a lot of effort to make sure it was clear, articulate, NPOV, non-original, and altogether wiki-friendly. I'd like to work towards featured article status, this is the first step. David Schroder 15:54, 28 February 2006 (UTC)

• I regret to say I don't want to actually read an article on Protestant theology (I clicked because I figured it was an oddly titled Culture of Armenia article, idiot, I know), but if you want to look towards featured status, you might want to revise with respect to Wikipedia:Lead section, and think about the article layout and three(!) portal templates. Some pix outside those might be nice, too, though the Arminius one does work fine at that teeny size. --zippedmartin 17:39, 28 February 2006 (UTC)

Haha, I understand. Thanks for the thoughts, I'll work on adding a better lead, pictures, and am going to remove one of the templates. David Schroder 18:05, 28 February 2006 (UTC)

• You may want to ease off the sub-headings in the "History" section which does not appear to require any, especially if it is a Wikipedia:Summary Style summation of the main article. The "Current Landscape" sub-section does not seem to fit in with the "History" section. Consider putting that into its own section - also that list should become prose (what about those people, what did they do be worthy of mention, what is their opinion?). With the titles of section, only capitalize the first word unless it is a name (eg. Current Landscape → Current landscape) and use the word "and" rather than "&". Aviod making self-references, like "They are examined in greater detail in the article for conditional election." Avoid having section without text, like "Theology". --maclean25 20:04, 3 March 2006 (UTC)

Thanks for your feedback. Those were all good suggestions, I made the respective changes. David Schroder 02:36, 4 March 2006 (UTC)