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Architecture of Leeds

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I've listed this article for peer review because it has achieved GA status and I think it may be suitable for a FA nomination. A peer review would be helpful.

Thanks, Mtaylor848 (talk) 21:08, 21 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: Interseting article, but I think it needs a lot of work before it is ready for FAC IMO. With an eye to WP:FAC, here are some suggestions for improvement.

The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article. My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way but most of the headers are not in the lead. This may be a sign that the article may need fewer sections / headers too. The lead also probably should be four paragraphs long per WP:LEAD.
Watch overlinking, see WP:OVERLINK. For example in just the lead Leeds is linked twice (once as City of Leeds, which is a redirect). Generally link things once in the lead and then the first occurrence in the article.
Do not use abbreviations without first spelling them out, and linking the term if possible, so for example Royal Institute of British Architects (RIBA) awards
Article needs more refs in a few places - one example The Abbey House Museum keeps records and displays artefacts from the abbey as well as from other eras across Leeds. Paintings of the Abbey have come from artists as renowned as J. M. W. Turner and Thomas Girtin. In 1889 the abbey was purchased by Colonel John North and presented to Leeds City Council. The council restored parts of the abbey and made it safe for public enjoyment before opening it in 1895. has no ref. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
Per WP:IMAGE do not sandwich text between images.
Per WP:MOS#Images, images should be set to thumb width to allow reader preferences to take over. For portrait format images, "upright" can be used to make the image narrower.
The hardest FAC criterion for most articles to meet is a porfessional level of English - this needs a copyedit, but I would try to address the other issues first and then get a copyedit or at least print it out and read it out loud slowly.
A model article is useful for ideas and examples to follow - there is at least one similar article that is an FA, Buildings and architecture of Bristol, which seems like it would be a great model.

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 02:21, 30 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]