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Ara Canal

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I've listed this article for peer review because i want to get a more information.

Thanks, Pkh409 (talk) 02:34, 8 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from White Arabian Filly

In the infobox, the end point needs double brackets, not single ones.
The history section needs expansion.
In the Outline section the reference could be put in the table instead of the header.
"5million ton" could be changed to "5 million tons".
Shouldn't "hanyang river" be capitalized?
"Yellow sea" should be "Yellow Sea".
"So installing 'rain water pump'" is sort of awkward. The sentence needs to be changed to start with something other than so.
"suhyang" should be Suhyang.
"Also in Ara marine center" could be rephrased to start with something other than also.
The cultural life subsection needs to start with a the.

White Arabian Filly (Neigh) 23:48, 16 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Checkingfax

Hi Pkh409. I will go in and make some edits directly, then get back to you with any suggestions. Looks like White Arabian Filly has set a high bar for me to reach. Cheers! {{u|Checkingfax}} {Talk} 04:19, 24 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Pkh409. Here are some quick suggestions:

In the Outline of Ara Canal project section, in the table, change: main Canal → Main canal, for consistency and per MoS re: Title Casing and sentence casing.
Dedicated Controversy sections are deprecated. We are now instructed to weave the controversy throughout the prose of the article (where it is germane to the prose).
Suhyang should always lead with a Cap S.
In the Scenic views of Suhyang section there is no need for "scare quotes". Erase them. All of them.
Same for the Bicycle and Ara Marina subsections: lose the "scare quotes".
Research Ara Marina to see if it should be: Ara marina.
In the Gyeongin Ara Culture Festival section, lose the single quote marks around 'Gyeongin Ara Culture Festival'
Research 'Gyeongin Ara Culture Festival' to see if it should be in Title Case or sentence case.
After this sentence: The program has changed every year and this year's program as follows. there is nothing really following it.
It is the largest shopping mall in Ara canal region. is not supported by a reference.
Since you have more than eight Notes you could invoke a column width by using the {{Reflist|30em}} template and with the 30em column width value.
I added some Portals at the bottom of the page. If you later expand to having a See also section you could move them up there and covert them to box style by omitting the bar call out from the template.
I set the datestyle to dmy (DAY/MONTH/YEAR), so use that going forward in the prose and in references.
Change Note with: and future( → and future (
I repaired a date error in one of the Notes.
The article currently has a lot of one-line paragraphs. Expanding those would look and would flow better.
Use the {{convert}} template to convert all metric units to standard units too. Click on the template linked here to see all the parameters you can use for conversion. Ping me if I can assist with that.
Here is the diff for my first edit round.
Here is the diff for my second edit round.
Here is the diff for my third edit round.

Cheers! {{u|Checkingfax}} {Talk} 05:09, 24 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]