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Aqua (band)

Ok, I completely rewrote this article yesterday. It's my second pretty much sololy written FA attempt (the other, Vanilla Ninja, succeeded about six months ago). I think it's complete and ready to take to the FAC page, but something's telling me it's missing something. I'd like some feedback on it, so any changes can be made. Thanks.. Hedley 01:32, 30 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]

Years and months are overlinked throughout the article. See date formatting for when to link these and when not.
I think the first couple of sections (up until Following the split) should be subsections of a History section.
Trivia sections should usually be avoided. Try to put the things into other sections (most seem like they would easily fit into History)
Some other things might need some explaination. For example, in the lead it says the band was "often criticised by the media", but it doesn't say for what they were criticised. --Fritz Saalfeld (Talk) 16:29, 31 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]

One thing that can be done to improve this article is to better represent criticisms of the group. The Hollaback Girl article offers a great example of how to represent criticism of a musical act. Cedars 00:45, 6 January 2006 (UTC)[reply]

First I must say that the version now is great work, but of course it could be better.

I agree with what has been said already.

I also think we should dump the trivia section. Two of them belong to the articles about Rene and Lene and should be moved to these articles. One could be moved to the history section. For the rest I suggest that we make a new section which should be about Aqua's impact on popular music. Aqua's Aquarium album spawned a wave of copycats, which for some reason almost all were from Denmark. Some new bands are descibed as making Aquaesque music. Even though "Barbie Girl" is now considered to be one of the worst songs ever written (by some polls) many covers and different versions of the song has been made. "Barbie Girl" is one of those songs that will never really die.

I don't believe that the license for Image:Aquaeuro011.PNG is correct. It is not a "music video or promotional video". It's basically a screenshot from a TV program.

--Maitch 13:57, 7 January 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Yes, merge the "Trivia" section with the body of the article. If something is important but does not fit anywhere then re-consider how the article is organized. Currently the article seems to be a narrative of the band's existence. Perhaps try to develop a section that analyses aspects of the band (for example, "Music videos" -which I note is already present-, or "Influences" or "Style"). Could the Barbie lawsuit be expanded beyond the three sentences in the body? All quotations need direct references. For example, "advised the parties involved "to chill"." and "it was the "best thing to do". " Do not be afraid to show where you used your references. Things that probably should be referenced for easy fact-checking include chart positions and critics' opinion. Do not use contractions, like "the Aquarius album didn't just follow one formula". Is that Sliding Doors image really the best image for that section? Have they always sung in English? Even in Europe? Watch your adjective language (for example, "and achieved huge success across the globe" is huge necessary? --maclean25 20:07, 13 January 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Per the criteria I've been working at here, this article may fail:

Lead - 2, 4

Comprehensiveness - 3, 4 (critical reception?)

Sales - Appears to meet them all, some chart data in discography section might be nice

Pictures - 1, 2

Audio - 1, 2, 3, 4

References - 1, 3, 4

Discography - Appears to meet them all (chart data here would be good)

Format/Style - 1, 2, 3, 4 (cites for "musical style", why the fansite in external links?, trivia section needs to go, songs in quotes, albums in italics)

Tuf-Kat 21:24, 19 January 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Note that I'm not working on this anymore. It seems another user has took over, and I've for the best part left Wikipedia. I will comment that some of Miatch's additions look like guesswork, though - Aqua weren't influenced by Eurodance, and weren't created as a Eurodance act. A lot of the musical influence stuff is very inaccurate. Hedley 23:41, 19 January 2006 (UTC)[reply]