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Anniemal

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I've listed this article for peer review because it's currently a GA, and any suggestions on how to improve it to FA quality would be helpful.

Thanks, PiracyFundsTerrorism (talk) 00:43, 23 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: Interesting article on an artist and album I have never heard. Briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here.

A model article is often useful for ideas and examples to follow - there are many album FAs that would be possible models at Wikipedia:Featured_articles#Music
Per WP:MOS#Images, images should be set to thumb width to allow reader preferences to take over. For portrait format images, "upright" can be used to make the image narrower, if desired.
This sentence seems problematic - "happy and melancholy" is unclear. She stated that she thought melodies that are happy and melancholy "[sound] timeless…Very Scandinavian of me!"[10] Having read the rest of the article, could it be rewritten to something like She stated that she thought melodies that are happy with a bit of melancholy sound "timeless … Very Scandinavian of me!"[10]? Also moved the [sound] outside the quote and added spaces around the ellipses per WP:MOS
I realize "Annie" is her stage name, but it seems odd not to mention her full name, especially since the background goes far enough back in time that it seems possible she had not yet adopted it then.
Any reason not to reverse the order of the two clauses in On its list of the top 50 albums of 2004, Pitchfork listed the album at number fifteen ...?
Since she is presumably not a native speaker of English, could there be any discussion of her decision to record in English? I know many Scandanavian groups do, and imagine it helps them reach a larger audience, but it seems as if it should be mentioned here in some way. Also any idea if "Anniemal" works as a pun / play on words in Norwegian as it does in English?
Is this an error - album on a singles chart?? The album debuted at its peak of number six on the Norwegian Singles Chart.[23]

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 18:37, 29 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Ealdgyth (talk · contribs)

You said you wanted to know what to work on before taking to FAC, so I looked at the sourcing and referencing with that in mind. I reviewed the article's sources as I would at FAC.
- What makes the following reliable sources?
  - http://dancemusic.about.com/od/artistshomepages/a/AnnieInt.htm (About.com isn't usually considered reliable)
  - http://acharts.us/

Hope this helps. Please note that I don't watchlist Peer Reviews I've done. If you have a question about something, you'll have to drop a note on my talk page to get my attention. (My watchlist is already WAY too long, adding peer reviews would make things much worse.) 13:47, 6 October 2008 (UTC)

In the event that someone reads this when the article goes to FAC, I used the About.com article because it's an interview. Annie's statement there is a primary source, so the article should meet WP:RS even though the site's secondary material would not necessarily qualify. PiracyFundsTerrorism (talk) 17:29, 8 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]