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I've listed this article for peer review because I believe this article is capable of reaching FA status. It is also part of my drive to get Liverpool F.C. to Featured Topic status. The article is based on the structure of existing Featured Articles such as Priestfield Stadium and Portman Road. Thanks in advance, as always, for your time and comments. NapHit (talk) 21:03, 18 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)

Hello NapHit, here you go...

"...formation in 1892 and was also the home of Everton F.C. until 1892." reads oddly. Did Liverpool therefore "evict" Everton or did they share?
"internationals matches at senior level" - one too many s's? And you could probably link (somehow) to may the England national team?
"There are plans to replace Anfield with a new stadium in Stanley Park. It will hold an extra 25,000 fans and is scheduled to open in 2011." - would merge these to make lead a little less choppy.
"John Houlding" - not clear what his relevance is?
" Liverpool Association Football Club" - why in bold? The article is not about Liverpool F.C....
Wikilink gable.
"second League Championship in 1906" - consider linking the year to a relevant football season article?
Spion Kop - is there a suitable link about the Boer war hill?
"huge roof" - bit POV.
A number of sentences which are split by a comma e.g. "In 1957 floodlights were installed and on October 30, 1957, they were switched on for the first time ..." - where I'd either use a semi-colon or an "and" rather than a comma to separate.
Link Shankly (or explain the gates were named after him, or both!).
"Lennart Johansson" - explain his significance.
"RFID" - expand on its first use... I had no idea!
"The Kop takes its name from a landmark hill in the township of Natal, South Africa. The stand was originally built in 1906 as an uncovered terrace capable of holding 30,000 people, a large roof was added in 1928." - feels a little too repetitive from the history section.
Bold Anfield in Future section - why?
Other uses - four "however..." sentences in quick succession reads awkwardly.
"ans during the inter-war" - typo.
" city ad finishing " - ditto.
Consider an average attendance graph.
Five external links feels a bit too much. Stick with official and that's about it...

That's it for now. Good luck! The Rambling Man (talk) 16:44, 20 February 2008 (UTC}

Dealt with all comments, except graph which I will produce soon hopefully if I can find some way of producing one NapHit (talk) 18:48, 21 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]

From the directions: "Please do not include any images, such as done/not done templates with tick/cross graphics..." Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 01:54, 21 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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Comments from ChrisTheDude (talk · contribs)

Looks good, here's some minor points that need looking at:

"was the home of Everton F.C. until 1892, after they left following a rent dispute" - should be when they left....
"hosted numerous international matches at senior level, with the last being" - reads like there will never be another such match at the stadium, which while quite likely is not confirmed, so maybe consider changing to "the most recent"
"The record attendance is 61,905 was set in...." - grammatically incorrect
"Each of its four stands have...." - should be "Each of its four stands has" as "each" is the subject and is singular
"There are plans to replace Anfield with a new stadium in Stanley Park, it will hold ....." - should be which will hold.....
"first League match at Anfield was played on 9 September 1893 against Lincoln City, Liverpool won 4–0 in front of 5,000 spectators", either change "Liverpool won" to "Liverpool winning" or make it a new sentence
"was similar to the main stand at Newcastle United's ground St James' Park, the stand proved to be a landmark in English football" - as per the last comment
"It was the largest Kop in the country" - maybe clarify prior to this sentence that other grounds also have/had stands with Kop in the name, otherwise it sounds like it was the largest out of a field of one
"floodlights were installed and on 30 October 1957; they were switched on" - no reason for a semi-colon there
"Shankly's wife Nessie" - as Shanks was dead by this point she was technically his widow, not his wife
"The Anfield Road stand, is use to house" - no need for a comma there, and it should be "used" not "use"
"the stand was once a simple low-lung stand" - is "low lung" a genuine architectural term (could be for all I know), or is it a typo?
The opening of the new stand by the Duke of Kent is mentioned in two separate places in almost identical terms, it really doesn't need to be in twice
"In 1921 Wolverhampton Wanderers and Cardiff City met in front of the King and Queen" - add wikilinks to indicate which King and Queen this was
"Wolverhampton won the replay, though Wolverhampton lost the final" - apart from the fact that Wolverhampton should not be used twice in such quick succession, the fact that they lost the final is irrelevant to an article on Anfield
"they went onto win the final, becoming the first club to win a semi-final at Anfield and go onto win the FA Cup" - both uses of "onto" should actually be "on to"
"The last international to be hosted at Anfield, was England's 2–1 victory" - no reason for comma after Anfield
"Liverpool did not lose a league match during the 1893–94, 1970–71, 1976–77, 1978–79, 1979–80 and 1987–88 seasons." - I think the words "home" or "at Anfield" are missing from this sentence

I know this seems like a lot, but they're all minor points which should be easily corrected. Other than that the article looks excellent, best of luck with it..... ChrisTheDude (talk) 14:14, 26 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]