Wikipedia:Peer review/Amanita caesarea/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because I think a peer review will help me make more improvements in it.
Thanks, Sainsf <^> (talk) 04:13, 5 October 2011 (UTC)
A few remarks:
- Seems a little short. Compare to Armillaria gallica.
- Perhaps add a little more detail about the spores.[1]
- Several sources mention the mushroom's role in the death of Emperor Claudius.
- Footnote 15 is not properly formed.
Regards, RJH (talk) 01:06, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
Finetooth comments
- I agree with RJH.
- Citation 14 is tagged "dead link" but actually links to an unrelated advertisement. This really should be fixed.
- The last two sentences of the first paragraph of the "Taxonomy" section need a source or sources. The entire second paragraph of this section is unsourced. My rule of thumb is to provide a source for every set of statistics, every unusual claim, every direct quotation, and every paragraph. If one source supports a whole paragraph, it should appear at the end of the paragraph. Anything that appears after the last inline citation of the paragraph will appear to lack a source.
- Should "carpophor" be linked or briefly explained. It appears in "these tend to fall off as the carpophor ages".
- "Certain varieties ( e.g. Amanita muscaria var. guessowii ) are close to yellow even at the juvenile stage." - Needs a source.
- It's often helpful to look at featured articles to see how other editors have handled similar topics. You'll find a list at WP:FA#Biology, for example Armillaria gallica, as noted by RJH above.
- Please make sure that the existing text includes no copyright violations, plagiarism, or close paraphrasing. For more information on this please see Wikipedia:Wikipedia_Signpost/2009-04-13/Dispatches. (This is a general warning given in view of previous problems that have risen over copyvios.)
I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider commenting on any other article at WP:PR. I don't usually watch the PR archives or make follow-up comments. If my suggestions are unclear, please ping me on my talk page. Finetooth (talk) 02:48, 19 October 2011 (UTC)