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All Hope Is Gone

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I've listed this article for peer review because we would like some peer input before we submit it for a FAC.

Thanks, REZTER ^TALK ø 15:23, 19 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments from Cannibaloki (talk · contribs)

• "It was released on August 26, 2008, by…" → "…on August 26, 2008 by…"
  • Done.
• You told me in the lead, which the album was released in a special edition..., okay, but and the normal edition?
  • Done.
• "The album was Slipknot's first #1 debut on the Billboard 200." → The other albums also peaked at number one, but the difference is that this first to debut in that position?
  • Cleared up.
• Billboard 200 → Billboard 200
  • Done.
• "Noted to have begun preparation in 2007, recording was due to begin in January 2008; however, it was delayed to February." → What does this sentence? Talk a little from where it was recorded (to keep this sentence, 'okay').
  • Done.
• Music style → Musical style
  • Done.
• On All Hope Is Gone Slipknot expanded on their use of traditional song structures, acoustics and solos that they first introduced on their previous album Vol. 3: (The Subliminal Verses). → Source?
  • That's just a generalist comment based on all the information which follows, almost like a little introduction, all the information afterwards is sourced.
• "Percussionist Crahan, compared it with the song "(sic)" from their debut album…"
• "Crahan stated…" ??? → "In an interview to Artistdirect, Crahan stated…"
• "Crahan cited "This Cold Black" as one..." → "He also cited "This Cold Black" as one..."
  • Overall Crahan three times.
  • Done.
• "...topped only by The Verve's album, Forth. [43]" → "...topped only by The Verve's album, Forth.[43]" (empty space between)
  • Done.
• "50 Best Guitar Albums of the Year"
  • Done.
• Who composed the music and wrote the lyrics? (Track listing section)
  • Done.
• "...and "Sulfur" .[52]" → "...and "Sulfur".[52]" (space again)
  • Done.

Regards, Cannibaloki 14:57, 20 December 2008 (UTC)