Wikipedia:Mormon collaboration/The Church of Jesus Christ of Latter-day Saints

The Church of Jesus Christ of Latter-day Saints

The tone of this article strikes me as that of a member of the Church, rather than a NPOV and formal tone. It is currently poorly referenced, uses weasel words ("members believe", "some say", "many non-members", etc.) and might be longer than is preferred. I would like to improve this to a point that I can submit it for peer review without obvious flaws in the article.
(vote or comment)

Support:

Lethargy 19:39, 2 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]
wrp103 (Bill Pringle) 19:56, 2 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]
uriah923^(talk) 21:32, 2 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Tom Stringham 01:15, 3 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]
You are always welcome to improve articles, and you don't need our permission. DJ Clayworth 13:21, 12 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]
This really should, at least, be up to Good standards --Trödel 20:59, 12 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Comments:

See my comments here. CyberAnth 20:00, 2 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Read my comments on the intro page above Bytebear 16:31, 12 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]
A large part of the work we need to do involves finding and citing reliable sources and removing all traces of original research. Please familiarize yourselves with these policies so you can help out. --Lethargy 23:49, 17 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]